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Just.Another.Falling.Star Member
since 2008-05-08
Posts 422Canada 
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I guess you could say this is a rant...and yet not really. _____________________________________________________________ I'm on a one way street with you, it seems, and we're going opposite directions. We both have the same destination but our means of getting there are far from similar. Constantly clashing, there's no room for both of us here. Only one can get through to the end, to where life begins. But are we willing to leave the other to furthar our own selfish lives? Or will we wait together and put up with the problems that the world throws at us, will we wait together until we find ourselves... julianna |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Oh but I DO love this piece! Great work indeed! ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!" |
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HolsJoscelyne Junior Member
since 2011-04-05
Posts 23Colchester, United Kingdom |
that's so good, and even if you didn't mean to, there are potential layers. I'm assuming it's written about conflicting lovers as is most of the poetry written on the teen forum but I'm thinking it could also be twins before birth? Just a thought. If you could revisit this and alter the structure and look at the spellings. It'd be perfect all the key components and words and phrases are all there to make a poem or prose that literally goes 'POW' with emotion! Good luck! Holly Joscelyne poetry at dougthedreadpoetry.blogspot.com |
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