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Teen Poetry #9

So Alone...

animecrazy71
Junior Member

since 2010-10-01

Posts 16
Pakistan

0 posted 2010-11-10 02:30 PM

Shadows in the dark,
Presence just as stark,

Like Needle in a hay stack,
Stormy night, Broken Shack,

A lavish bar,of a hotel,
Sits a drink-less bottle,

Sits a lonely black jack,
In a faceless card stack,

Friendship is a lone ship to me,
A drowning ship in the open sea,

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Chavo.wavo
Junior Member

since 2010-11-13

Posts 15

1 posted 2010-11-13 02:02 PM

I loved this.the words jumped straight through my eyes and hit me in the heart. I can feel the emotion it took to write this. Beautiful work.

XGarapanX
Senior Member

since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

2 posted 2011-01-05 09:28 PM

This produces a great effect in the reader. Powerfully done.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

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