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Teen Poetry #9

Stained Glass

mozart4321
Junior Member

since 2010-06-29

Posts 29

0 posted 2010-06-29 02:58 PM

Like stained glass,
my life shattered into
different colors.
separated areas of
focus.
shapes divided by
uneven lines.
each piece its
own and unique.
but together,
a whole.

UNTAMEDelegance
Member

since 2009-05-30

Posts 222
Oregon

1 posted 2010-06-30 04:48 PM

I love it. Just as in your last poem that I saw, the imagery is stunning. And if I might be so bold to say that I thought the imagery was better in this one. Even though it is a simple, short poem, the effect is elegant and dramatic. The one thing I might work on is grammer unless it was intentionally done the way it was. If it was intentional then I completely understand.
Beautiful poem.

~UNTAMEDelegance

Misa: I can't imagine a world without Light!
L: Yes, that would be dark.

mozart4321
Junior Member

since 2010-06-29

Posts 29

2 posted 2010-07-01 02:28 PM

thank you!! what do you suggest for grammar?

*tori_rose*
Junior Member

since 2010-10-12

Posts 44
Weber City, VA

3 posted 2010-10-14 06:59 PM

i love it

simple and short yet says so much.

~*tori*~

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