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Teen Poetry #9

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broken_smile1469
Member

since 2006-07-02

Posts 104

0 posted 2010-05-05 09:25 PM

the darkness, it won't go away.
i want to get out, and escape
this horrendous world in which i live
the smile i keep having to fake.

I'm not like the rest.
I don't see the world the same.
I see the beauty, i want it.
everyones to blame.

I try to be beautiful.
cliche as opposed to unique.
still my mind floats away
and all anyone does is critique

the way i look.
the way i dress.
will it ever be enough?
i'm sick this nonsense.

I'll just lay here.
get lost within my mind.
where everything's perfect.
my own world, divine.

WaterFairy103
Member

since 2006-05-31

Posts 196

1 posted 2010-05-09 03:02 AM

I like this! It's kind of edgy, and it changes toward the end, so you kind of get a "screw you guys!" feel. Good job.

Don't take life so seriously. It's not permanent.

whisperingwalt
Member

since 2010-04-29

Posts 240
Coquitlam, BC, Canada

2 posted 2010-05-09 04:26 PM

Nice rhymes....good self reflection...It is who are that counts. keep on writing, it does wonders for the soul.

broken_smile1469
Member

since 2006-07-02

Posts 104

3 posted 2010-05-10 12:45 PM

thanks!

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