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Little Secret.
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Little Secret. |
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eternalbeauty New Member
since 2010-03-23
Posts 5NJ |
All was good with you and me We both beleived it was meant to be but one little secret turned things awry now when I think of you; all I do is cry. I miss you, I miss your kiss I miss the never ending bliss. Things were Oh, so perfect when i was with you, but now its all over and with me, your through. |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Not bad  But the rhyming scheme was hard to follow. Maybe work on that? Otherwise good job. Oh and welcome to Pip!! -Zach Wish I could find love.. But all I find these days are superficial fish in shallow waters. |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
Nice write! I liked it! Welcome to Pip!!! “All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling.”--Oscar Wilde |
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eternalbeauty New Member
since 2010-03-23
Posts 5NJ |
thankss to both of you! mella:)<3 |
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