Falling rain
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since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois
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2009-01-26
10:35 PM
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![rose and blood Pictures, Images and Photos](http://i421.photobucket.com/albums/pp300/BrokenAngel-28/vampire_.jpg) As I lay in silent agony Quenching blood to fill my veins A never ending lust for this venom As it leaves me wrenching in pain. My heart lays silent in my chest A constant reminder of my past Now to live for eternity Forever as an outcast. Mortals fear me Once they see my smile. Hush now my darling It'll only last a while. Blood gone cold Eyes filled with fire. For I am the one and only. Legendary vampire.
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Zach Booker-Scott
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GothicCherry
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since 2008-09-16
Posts 471
TN
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posted
2009-01-27
08:08 PM
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Sweee-eet!! I really enjoyed this..
I like that it isn't very long because I normally get bored reading long poems; however, the content was interesting enough to where it could bear a few more stanzas without losing the reader I'm sure.
A few places should probably be punctuated differently, but besides that I can't think of anything to pick on.
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abhursty
Junior Member
since 2009-02-25
Posts 45
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posted
2009-02-25
10:26 AM
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It sounded really good.
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