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Leanne <3
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0 posted 2010-03-15 01:25 AM


hey guys i know i haven't posted in so long, i just haven't had any inspiration whatsoever! this piece isn't really my best, but enjoy  


Cast them Judgmental eyes from me
You haven’t any idea where I’ve been
Don’t speak out against me
When you haven’t seen what I’ve seen

How can you sit there and say
That this life I lead is wrong?
When you’re the one that got me here
After neglecting me this long

Just go back to that pipe
That you so dearly adore
I’ll fight these battles on my own
Like I always did before

Because truth be told
You were never really there
Even when I came to you
With me deepest secrets to share

I never got a childhood
I grew up way to fast
Because I was trying to be a mother
To the daughters you looked past

So cast them judgmental eyes from me
and ask yourself where you’ve been
while your family grew up without you
and saw things they shouldn’t have seen.



Inside this exterior, over which the eye might have roved there was the record of a pulsing life, which had learnt too well for its years – Thomas Har

[This message has been edited by Leanne <3 (03-15-2010 02:45 AM).]

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Chalmette Guy
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1 posted 2010-03-17 09:03 AM


Nobody should grow up like this. I feel this and for you, hopefully this isn't as much real as metaphorical.
Either way, well done Leanne.

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2 posted 2010-03-17 12:21 PM


"I never got a childhood
I grew up way to fast
Because I was trying to be a mother
To the daughters you looked past"

Man, do I know how that feels. (well minus the daughters. I had brothers. heh. Anyway..) This is a really nice poem. I kinda want to see you try to use more imagery in your poems. But its just a thought.

Keep writing.    

Wish I could find love.. But all I find these days are superficial fish in shallow waters.

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