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spoiledsushi
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since 2010-02-25

Posts 7
Tejas

0 posted 2010-03-03 06:42 PM

Ode to My Sweater
by Cara

Given to me by a past friend
A time ago when I was younger.

Dark shades of grey
In its delicate body,
With many holes and tears.
It comforts me still
When my heart is ill.

When I wear it
I can almost feel
His calming arms
Wrapped around me once more,
Sheltering me under his wing.

The sensation I feel when I see it,
Joyful, my soul sings
Like a child on their birthday.

My sweater has aged,
It is worn and used,
Still precious in my life
No matter how tortured.

The days have been painful,
Cold without him.
When I put on my sweater
The warmth of his love
Spreads through my veins,
Releasing the weight of my fears.

My sweater is a companion
That I need each passing day,
One I am sure
Will never leave me.

We function as one.
I am alive
If the sweater still breathes.
Our last sigh exhaled
Will be shared.

Relieved,
We will meet again.

Any suggestions, comments?

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

1 posted 2010-03-27 05:35 PM

Cool poem! Very interesting! I enjoyed reading it!

“All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling.”--Oscar Wilde

Taylor See
Member

since 2008-10-07

Posts 55
North Carolina, US

2 posted 2010-03-29 10:55 AM

I'm not going to lie, when I saw the title I expected this to be a silly poem.

But reading it, I found a beautiful expression of a sentiment that was well-expressed and wonderfully written.

Great read, keep writing!

~Taylor

And as each player moves their piece, confident and tall
They forget that they can move themselves, in the greatest game of all

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

3 posted 2010-03-29 01:20 PM

I'm gonna have to agree with Taylor. I thought it would be something funny. But it held more meaning then what I expected. Great job on this.

-Zach

Wish I could find love.. But all I find these days are superficial fish in shallow waters.

Kim
Junior Member

since 2010-03-20

Posts 10
U.K.

4 posted 2010-04-02 10:19 AM

i agree, i thought it would be a funny poem, but its really nostalgic! loved it!

Bob K
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since 2007-11-03

Posts 4208

5 posted 2010-04-03 02:16 AM

I, too, enjoyed it. I didn't want to offer any critique, but what I did want is to offer a poem by Pablo Neruda as a reply, because it contains and it amplifies something of the restrained feeling in this poem. It's his "Ode to My Socks," and it's translated by Robert Bly, whom you might also enjoy.

In addition to "Ode to My Socks," you might also love Neruda's Twenty Love Songs and a Poem of Despair. Neruda, the Chilean Nobel Prize winner, wrote in Spanish. If you can read Spanish — and I, sadly, cannot — you may find your experience even more fun. If Not, Bly does a wonderful job; and W.S.Merwin, translates the book I mentioned. He won the Pulitzer, and his translation is superb.
http://swellsknits.blogspot.com/2009/10/as-i-finished-this-sock-i-remembered.html

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