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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
I don't know how good this poem is, but I just wrote it, so I can't expect it to be good. Sorry if it's a bit long, just let me know what you think, even if you don't like it. My nose sniffles On top this freezing hill, Whining, While I wait for J. Williams, Boyfriend No. 7, But if he doesn't show, My nose Is sure to fall off And die, And decompose. My fingers quiver A little here and a little there, Whispering, While I wait for T. White, Boyfriend No. 9, But if he doesn't show, My fingers Are sure to break off And die, And decompose. My hair sways With the beating winds of this hill, Whipping, While I wait for L. Whitney, Boyfriend No. 12, But if he doesn't show, My hair Is sure to fall off And dance away, And decompose. My feet tap… While I wait… Boyfriend No. 16, But if he doesn't show… And die, And decompose. My arms… My lips… My eyes water… Boyfriend No.32… But if he doesn't show… But if he doesn't show… My heart Will fall frozen And die, And decompose. “All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling.”--Oscar Wilde |
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Leanne <3 Member
since 2007-08-25
Posts 216N.S.W, Australia |
No i really enjoyed reading this, it wasnt too long either. Was a sad storyline you told it well! -Lee |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
Thanks!!! “All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling.”--Oscar Wilde |
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unfinishedlife Junior Member
since 2010-03-06
Posts 22 |
Goodness!! I adore the way you write. This is very nicely done.  |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
Thank you!!! “All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling.”--Oscar Wilde |
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