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littlemonster
Junior Member

since 2010-05-06

Posts 39
UK

0 posted 2012-01-14 12:01 PM

You will grow
weary
of me
my fine porcelain prince
and return
gallantly to your
battalion of men
wounded but
not yet
defeated.

There they will
dust you
off
before sending you
back out
in a stoic
parade of victory
and oh how
my prince
will be worshiped
and adored
as I failed
to do
adequately.

And you
you
will grow old
with grace
where as I
I
will never
be anything more
than this shadow
who chases
the memory of
what it was
to be
loved
by a King
amongst men.

LaGraceLa
Member

since 2011-01-30

Posts 243
Minnesota, USA

1 posted 2012-01-21 08:26 AM

I love the line breaks you used, it really added a rhythm and gave it more emphasis. Beautiful idea well writen, great job.

littlemonster
Junior Member

since 2010-05-06

Posts 39
UK

2 posted 2012-01-25 04:06 PM

Thank you for taking the time to read- it is a poem which means much to me, the one which i hope conveys my fears and sadness at what is to come.

arofriend
New Member

since 2012-06-07

Posts 9

3 posted 2012-07-02 10:12 PM

Beautiful and sad poem. I love your use of porcelain dolls to underscore the emptiness of the speaker's memories and ultimately of the deeds for which he's pining to begin with.

I just read your comment and I can see how this poem would mean a lot to you. I don't know if you intended the meaning I thought you had in my last paragraph but the porcelain dolls sure hit me with a lot of sadness.

Marilyn
Member Elite

since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

4 posted 2012-07-13 01:39 PM

Wow I know this feeling!!

Marilyn
Member Elite

since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

5 posted 2012-07-13 02:39 PM

and I will be nothing more then a shadow....

Tears..yup that is me.

Marilyn
Member Elite

since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

6 posted 2012-07-13 02:51 PM

Sorry about the report...my cache would not let me see that my response posted.

Shortysdadd
Junior Member

since 2011-06-26

Posts 39

7 posted 2012-08-29 10:52 PM

I enjoyed this. thank you

littlemonster
Junior Member

since 2010-05-06

Posts 39
UK

8 posted 2012-09-04 03:29 PM

Thank you for the comments- glad that you all like it.

byski
Member

since 2006-01-26

Posts 235
Alberta, Canada

9 posted 2012-09-18 04:36 AM

The image of a dusty porcelain doll sitting on a shelf unloved and untouched is tremendously sad. Why must we put such beauty on a pedestal and forget about it? Nice write!

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