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LaGraceLa
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since 2011-01-30
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Minnesota, USA

0 posted 2011-12-27 10:16 AM



If only I could make you see
how much you mean to me.
Then maybe you'd try to be
what you could be if you set it free.
Let it go, breathe it out
even if you cry and shout 
because I can't take your pain anymore,
I'm tired of cleaning your blood off the floor
and I know you can be so much more.
Please, open your clenched hand
and give it up, you don't need to understand.
All you're doing is killing yourself.
Put those pills back on their self
and toss the razor in the trash,
you can be born new from the ash--
remains of the fire burning red and hot,
pain and anger inside you caught,
twisting and tearing and ripped to shreds
while the misconceived thought imbeds
itself into your delicate mind
leaving you all alone to find
some peace, some hope, some scrap of love
as I watch my reflection from up above
trying to make the person staring back
see that I fill in what she obviously lacks.
You're not alone, I try to say
but she snarls, I'm not doing this-- not today.

© Copyright 2011 Sarah Grace - All Rights Reserved
ponderthepoetorrsx
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since 2011-06-25
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1 posted 2011-12-28 04:14 AM


i can sort of relate to this in parts i really like it
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2 posted 2011-12-28 01:47 PM


Nicely done.  All we can ever do is to be supportive and help those that can not help themselves.  It is definitely a cry for help we have to hear.


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maddorani
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since 2007-11-18
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houston,tx
3 posted 2011-12-30 08:34 PM


love it
tracie66
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4 posted 2012-01-04 05:40 AM


a powerful write, well penned

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
                        â€” W. E. Channing



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