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Dark Poetry #5

when i expire

ponderthepoetorrsx
Member

since 2011-06-25

Posts 284
U.S , Ca

0 posted 2011-11-05 04:37 PM

The days pass faster
and life grows shorter
and death abounds
Filling the graveyards
with flesh and bones and secrets we all regret
and thus will never be able to forget.

so when i expire
i want no salty tears
i want no secrets kept.

before i die i want to see my life flash
before mine eyes
and see all the tragedies that passed
the reasons my tears were spent.

and at the golden gates
i want to point and say they're the reason
i have no regrets.

so when i expire
remember the bad but remember the good
write it down in all your golden hearts
and go on with renewed strength
as i watch you all from above.

LaGraceLa
Member

since 2011-01-30

Posts 243
Minnesota, USA

1 posted 2011-11-06 05:59 PM

I found it very neat how you started the poem off quite morbid, but it ended pleasantly hopeful. It always makes writing stand out more when changes like that are made, so good job!

ponderthepoetorrsx
Member

since 2011-06-25

Posts 284
U.S , Ca

2 posted 2011-11-06 11:14 PM

thanks this isnt the one i was going to upload but i cant seem to find it so im just going to upload one all my friends seem to like i like it too(= thanks again

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