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lost soul |
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karren29 Member
since 2011-09-29
Posts 85philippines |
I watch the sky turn gray I kneel down and pray For God to take the pain away And help me to be strong everyday My wings are broken I can no longer fly But I'll find my heaven Where there'll be no tears to cry My knees are wounded I don't think I can still walk But I remember how my life ended I can still hear them talk I'm a lost soul Trying to find my way home I'm a lost soul Trying to find my way, alone I've been through hell I've been hurt so bad But everything's gonna go well So there's no need to be sad I'm a lost soul Trying to be strong I'm a lost soul Singing a sad, sad song I'm a lost soul Trying to do no wrong I'm a lost soul Been lost for so long Hear me God, I can't do this anymore Please Father, lead me to your door I don't wanna be lost anymore Take my hand Oh Lord I'll crawl on the ground Cry without a sound One day, MAYBE, one day, I'll be found... " u were never good enough for him or anything like me, |
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priyanka Member
since 2009-06-15
Posts 216india |
It is just beautiful karren!! May the lord be with you, I'm sure you'll find the way  great write! thank you for the post |
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LaGraceLa Member
since 2011-01-30
Posts 243Minnesota, USA |
This is a very interesting poem, but every here and there the rhythm or beat or pattern, whatever you want to call it, felt a little bit off. Granted you may have done that on purpose, but I think that this poem could be absolutely stunning if those few things were smoothed out a little. Other then that, it was flawless! |
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karren29 Member
since 2011-09-29
Posts 85philippines |
oh sorry lagracella, yeah, this is actually a song,, thats why  " u were never good enough for him or anything like me, |
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