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ponderthepoetorrsx
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since 2011-06-25
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U.S , Ca

0 posted 2011-09-05 05:24 PM


hey
do you see the tears,
that flow and drip and leave a searing trail
on my cheeks as down they go?
can you hear my frantic screams,
that resonate directly from my soul
pouring out my inner core?
do you smell the iron rust,
of the dried blood before you on the ground
that fell that fateful day?
can you feel my heartbeat still,
just like the night you held me tightly
and looked up into the sky?
do you still feel the taste of pepper gale,
upon your lips from that passionate
first kiss?
or is just a feeble fading memory,
as i myself slowly burn in hell?




yolilitzli

[This message has been edited by ponderthepoetorrsx (09-06-2011 07:05 PM).]

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LaGraceLa
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since 2011-01-30
Posts 243
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1 posted 2011-11-05 10:48 AM


Such a powerful poem sold so short by that title! This poem is beautiful and raw, it deserves a title that reflects that at least a little bit, don't you think
ponderthepoetorrsx
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2 posted 2011-11-05 03:43 PM


thank you ill edit it

yolilitzli

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