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ponderthepoetorrsx
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0 posted 2011-06-25 03:56 AM



Many a mile did I travel
Through distant lands of sorrow
Through the land of terror
In search of the morrow.

The sun above me pale and cold
Above me shown at midnights darkest hour,
The path was cold, the darkness overwhelming, the heat unbearable.
I traveled I traveled
Through the lands of the sorrow in search of the morrow,
Yet found by daylight’s calmest hour
Naught but terror.

I trailed behind you
Trailed and trailed
Till I got lost in the sorrow.

So it happened that before he found the land of dawn
He got lost in the costly land of the lost.

The last I thought
While in the dark
Was thoughts of you.

And as his life to expire began,
He thought of his past life
Of his lost hopes and broken dreams.
With sadness and sorrow
He had traveled in search of the morrow
Through the distant lands of horror.

Now here he lays
Weak, meek, bewildered, alone and dying.

I laid down to sleep, shivered from the cold
And thought thoughts of you
Of your sweet eyes and words.

And with his last dying breath.

With the last of my soul, the last of my breath.
In the last seconds of life, I uttered
Your name.

yolilitzli

© Copyright 2011 richard salgado - All Rights Reserved
XGarapanX
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1 posted 2011-07-09 12:11 PM


Epic. And I LOVE epic. You have all of the tools of an excellent writer of poetry. Spit and polish will help the mechanics of it to fine tune.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·
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ponderthepoetorrsx
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2 posted 2011-07-11 06:02 PM


thanks
Sunshine
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3 posted 2011-07-11 08:05 PM


Richard,

Welcome to Passions. I'm sorry I didn't see this when it was first posted, but in this blue world of ours, it's never too late to issue a huge Welcome! I don't read "dark" poetry much, but every now and then I venture in.

I didn't find this so much a "dark" piece as I did a well versed story line...and I enjoyed it.

Please check your email for a Very Special Welcome!

"The business of the poet...is to show the sorriness underlying the grandest things and the grandeur underlying the sorriest things." Thomas Hardy

Haf_Alive
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4 posted 2011-09-04 08:48 PM


it's like a dark journey in the name of love.  i think it's really sweet tbh.  just too bad he dies   maybe love saves him off the record
ponderthepoetorrsx
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5 posted 2011-09-04 10:34 PM


lol in a way i guess haha
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