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chylenedoney
Junior Member
since 2010-10-14
Posts 27
Idaho, USA

0 posted 2010-10-28 04:38 PM



You say I am beautiful
but my mirror says otherwise
In it, I see all of the flaws I dispise
And yet you say I am beautiful.

You say that I am intelligent
but my grades speak as loud as words could
If I could rip my homework limb from limb I would
And yet you say I am intelligent.

You say I am talented
but all I see is ugly black smears
that frustrate me beyond my limit to the point of tears
And yet you say I am talented.

You say I am happy
but you don't see what I hide every day
I know there are people worse off, but I can't see it that way
And yet you say I am happy.

You say I am warm
but I am so cold
shivering and straining under my icy load
And yet you say I am warm.

You say that I have everything
But Do I?
These are Your words not mine.

Blackwidowgurl

© Copyright 2010 Chylene Doney - All Rights Reserved
s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105
Watertown, NY
1 posted 2010-10-28 06:45 PM


People make too many assumptions - "You're warm/happy/blessed/etc." they never take the time to know anymore. Enjoyed this.

-Trina.

"To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose."

abhursty
Junior Member
since 2009-02-25
Posts 45

2 posted 2010-10-31 10:20 AM


I wish it wasn't true but it is. Everywhere you look you hear people saying the opposite of what you think. Just remember what you think is right. Only try not to be so hard on yourself. All in all it was a great poem.
XGarapanX
Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435
Antarctica
3 posted 2011-02-01 12:54 PM


This poem is passion infused, well delivered, impacting and stirring.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·  "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

LaGraceLa
Member
since 2011-01-30
Posts 243
Minnesota, USA
4 posted 2011-04-10 12:10 PM


Thank you so much for sharing this poem. This is my favorite poem I have read in a long time. I don't even know what to say other than absolutely amazing.
abhursty
Junior Member
since 2009-02-25
Posts 45

5 posted 2011-04-12 09:41 AM


People always say things they know nothing about. They always wish to make you into who you're not. Just like the first comment-er said, people really don't take the time to know you for who you are. All in all, I love it.
karanj07
New Member
since 2011-04-20
Posts 3

6 posted 2011-04-20 03:47 PM


Nice 1!! thnx 4 sharing it
maddorani
Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423
houston,tx
7 posted 2011-04-21 07:18 PM


i loved it kind of sounds like me
Vulpine
Junior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 20
Minnesota
8 posted 2011-07-13 10:55 PM


wow this was a great poem! loved it

I just want you to believe in me when no one else does.

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