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Barron
Junior Member

since 2009-09-16

Posts 10
Ohio, US

0 posted 2010-07-15 05:58 AM

I stare at the distant night sky
As if it's just an old friend
That I went to when I needed to cry
When I was begging for the pain to end

But nothing could ever end it
It just changed and grew
I could do nothing to mend it
So I turned to the only thing I knew

The stars in which I could always confide
The ones I hoped could turn the tide
My imagination would fill me with hope
And my old friend would throw me the rope

Higher and higher I rose
Above the world I never froze
and when I thought I'd never stop
The rope would snap and I would drop

Thus the beginning of my plummet
Falling, falling past the summit
I see my target, but I miss
And fall deeper into my own abyss

Many times the rope was thrown
and equal times the rope would snap
When will I realize I'm on my own?
When will I stop falling for that trap?

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

1 posted 2010-07-16 08:13 AM

This is a sad write, and in some ways deep waters, to use an old phrase.

Have you yet tried praying for your enemies, as Jesus of Nazareth reportedly advised? Seriously, although it does sound like some sort of lunacy in reality...

Barron
Junior Member

since 2009-09-16

Posts 10
Ohio, US

2 posted 2010-07-17 02:04 AM

Thanks for the reply, although I'm not religious, therefore I don't pray. If my writing seemed to point at a religious base, I'm sorry. It wasn't intended as such.

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

3 posted 2010-07-17 04:13 AM

Not religious, necessarily, but your writing here certainly speaks of interaction attempted. Oh well, we didn't create ourselves, but we sure are tasked with stewarding ourselves here. Yeehaw.

Barron
Junior Member

since 2009-09-16

Posts 10
Ohio, US

4 posted 2010-07-17 07:25 AM

I usually leave my writing open to the reader's interpretation, and still do, but what I was feeling and aiming for with this one was more of a rapid rise and fall in emotions and feelings. My purpose was to symbolize the transition (or lack thereof) between mania and depression (in technical terms).

rachaelfuchsberger

Senior Member

since 2007-02-21

Posts 609
Las Vegas, NV

5 posted 2010-07-18 04:47 PM

As the daughter and sister of mainic depressants, and one trying to avoid the same road that my mother and brother both went down, I can certainly see this for the mental and emotional roller coaster it is. Very deep, and well written.

-Arana Darkwolf
Like a cat, I'll land on my feet. I always do.

Pixie Wales
Junior Member

since 2010-07-29

Posts 21
UK

6 posted 2010-07-30 03:15 PM

Your poem is wonderfully writen and I can relate to your words

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

7 posted 2010-10-08 01:02 AM

I love this. Indeed a powerful write.

There are places in the heart that do not yet exist; suffering has to enter in for them to come to be - LeonBloy

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