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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana 
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Tie me up Tear me down Your words burn into me You take my soul out of me Now how do you feel To see me so low? Happiness is hell You make my blood run cold And you claw at my face Peel the skin back Torture me Keep me from sleeping Because dreams destroy And I am the next one to go And I am the last one to know I am all that you fear Yet I am the one in misery Take me Just take me Take me away From this pain |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Wow! Just..bravo! wow... ~Amaryllis |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
I don't know why you honor me so A...but thank you very much. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Because I`m fascinated by dark writing.. in the sense that maybe I`ve not yet completely gone there yet in my own writings.. it takes a certain bravery, too.. this particular piece you wrote, here above.. it is so raw, and perhaps my own mardi-gras mask is still too attached to my face.. ? maybe.. just keep on writing.. I am sooo enjoying all of the talent here on pip! I eat these poems for breakfast.. (though this one is a heavy one to start the day with..lol)  Always~Amaryllis |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Well then, you'll like my dark ones. These are all written years ago though, when I felt everything raw. It's hard to write like that now, to allow yourself to go there. In posting these, I am trying to go there again and write like this again. You are so good for my darkness, A. lol |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Aye.. you cannot see a shadow without the light to cast it, hey.. Your work reminds me a bit of my younger brother`s.. his writing was always so tortured, until he married & did the whole settling down & hub & daddy thing.. now his writing has mellowed, an that`s okay too.. I adore all kinds of poetry, myself.. how bo-ring would that be if we all had the same voice? ick. Viva la difference! ~A |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Yeah, I think that's what happened to mine as well. Too busy most of the time to spend time exploring or explaining my angst. Now that I'm over the hill, I don't even have much desire to anyway. lol |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
lol! Ah.. that hill? It just keeps moving farther off.. it`s like a water-mark mirage on the heated road.. don`t believe it.  Be well, my friend~Amaryllis |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
At the risk of making this one long Instant Message thread, lol...I know...I'm older than some, younger than others. At least that's what keeps me going. lol |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
lol! I gotcha, C.G.. I will shut up in a min, haha.. it`s just me hubbins guards my e-mail like a pitbull, if`n I keep it on the boards he`s cool with it all.. and I do need my poetry..so much.. thanks for understanding.. Have yer best day ever, and see ya around! ~Amaryllis |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Guards the email??? For what? What the hell? Are you not an adult? lol |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Lol!! Yeah, an adult oh yes, but some have their insecurities.. it is better to capitulate, keep peace and harmony.. it`s all okay.. truly I make it sound worse than it is lol =P erm, yeah. ~A |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
I don't know how to do those face things. lol |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
you put a colon --> : then a right parenthesis--> ) together.. and get--> presto!lol |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
I don't think anyone's bothering reading this anyway A. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
What! And we`re so fascinating~! lol |
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Eldest Member
since 2010-06-15
Posts 177Alabama |
more interesting than you know. Your poem is very graphic, but I remember many masks that I have worn and how painful and difficult it is (or would be) to discard them all. ;-) |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Thank you Eldest. That is very interesting what you just said there. |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
haha I lost my train of thoughts about your poem while i was reading the comments. It's Beautiful about sums it up tho. Happiness is Hell I know of this... There are places in the heart that do not yet exist; suffering has to enter in for them to come to be - LeonBloy |
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