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Ode to a friend
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Ode to a friend |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
She grew up counting pennies in a two-room flat. How the rich can lie. Dad ran out before that became fashionable--- how the poor can cry. Poisoned to death in a rehab center by her son's enemies---sad! Happy and healthy in Heaven's haven now, and for that I am glad. |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
I feel like there is more to this story than what you've written here. You gave such a short glimpse of a tragic tale, but haven't told us much more than the basic summary. I'd encourage you to look back and see if you can write more about this memory. It may be easier now that it has been even longer a time. Nice write  ,{~~*~~} EmilyTheStrange {~~*~~} I have a pet unicorn...his name is Flavius, as in Flavius Belby. Flavius does not like gumballs.. |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Thx 4 ur kind words. Things would have to get much better in my current life for anything like that to happen. "All I can do is a-shake-a my head, you might not believe that it's true..."  |
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brian thomas madden Junior Member
since 2010-07-08
Posts 32Ireland (between an ocean and a rock) |
It does sound like you are writing from very personal experience. well written |
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Eterne Member
since 2010-07-21
Posts 75Quebec, Canada |
In a way it shows that you cannot write more, just shake your head in disbelief, because it is very sad story lightly written... I hope you know what I mean by that... |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
There is a semi-famous Peanuts comic strip by Charles Schulz in which Linus is begging his sister Lucy to read a book to him (at that point Linus hadn't learned to read yet). Young curmudgeon-girl Lucy finally takes the book, opens it, and says aloud to him, "A man was born. He lived and died. The end." She hands the book back to Linus and leaves. In the last panel Linus muses, "It almost makes you wish you knew the guy." **** Not much happy about the above-posted poem/story except for the last stanza. You can assume, of course, that there was some good happiness in this person's life, but that she was very badly mistreated at times, and that some of those mistreaters aren't going directly to Heaven when they finally pass away. |
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