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jared34ricky
Junior Member

since 2008-12-30

Posts 12
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2009-01-14 01:09 AM

I can’t tell if you’re that lady in the Lexus
The one that drives by noticeably sad

Or maybe that pizza boy
Checking himself in the mirror of a window
Unaware of passerby’s on the other side

Are you the one jogging down the street
Hoping for some quick glance

Or the guy with a briefcase who knows it’s only a glorified knapsack

Could you be the man puffing on his pipe
At an outdoor diner
With that three times a charm read of a newspaper

Or what about that kid walking down the street
With a pair of phones in his ears
That appear to be attached to his soul

Maybe you’re that college chick strutting her stuff
That gets kicks out of different experiences

A bartender looking for love at thirty

Or how about that clerk selling ties at the mall
Speaking about how know one says please and thank you anymore

Maybe your some girl with an odd piercing
That speaks a little louder in awkward situations

By chance a melodramatic professor
That hasn’t touched coffee in two years

Or could you be a preacher who loves yelling at the crowds
Maybe one who cares
Ten feet away and it could be a devout viewer in the passenger seat of a pew

A man who wants a second shot at life
And then tries with a lotto ticket

Or how about a biker that doesn’t care about nature
An obsession of fitness where he forgets everything behind

A young teenage girl who loves Sylvia Plath
Or that old women who dreams at night in bed to marry again

There’s such a diversity of character

But with a point of personal perspective
It seems as if we’re all forced into these situations

I’m a chance encounter
Some guy with old holes in his jeans
That’s still trying to look to cool

LaGraceLa
Member

since 2011-01-30

Posts 243
Minnesota, USA

1 posted 2011-02-13 10:13 AM

Okay, this is beautiful. The set up is not wonderful, and sometimes the lines do no fit, but the message and the meaning cover up all of those tiny flaws. I love this poem. I love when you write
" Or what about that kid walking down the street
With a pair of phones in his ears
That appear to be attached to his soul". I love all of this poem. It wonderful, and I can not say how much I love it. Really really beautiful.

LaGraceLa
Member

since 2011-01-30

Posts 243
Minnesota, USA

2 posted 2011-02-15 04:59 PM

For some reason, what I commented did not show up... Basically, I said how much I love this poem. I knew exactly what you meant when you wrote about the headphones being connected to the boys soul. I reallyreally love this poem, it is wonderful.

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