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Dark Poetry #5

I would've...

ateague38
Junior Member

since 2010-03-25

Posts 13

0 posted 2010-03-25 03:50 PM

why are you laughing...whats so funny?
and what are you holding...why is it bloody?
why do i feel so suddenly strange...so drained of life and full of rage.
thats my heart...is it not? in it my soul is most certainly caught.
was stealing it a worthy task?...i would've given it if only you'd asked.

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

1 posted 2010-03-29 02:47 PM

I think we've all had our heart (soul?) taken from us every now and then. You expressed the feelings wonderfully.

-Zach

Wish I could find love.. But all I find these days are superficial fish in shallow waters.

ateague38
Junior Member

since 2010-03-25

Posts 13

2 posted 2010-03-29 09:29 PM

hey thanks man. i've read a few of yours and i've thoroughly enjoyed all of them.

LaGraceLa
Member

since 2011-01-30

Posts 243
Minnesota, USA

3 posted 2011-02-14 05:39 PM

I know that feeling all too well and it is a relief to have words to it, and your beautiful words at that. Thank you, I love it.

HippinTrippy
Member

since 2010-03-26

Posts 103
New York

4 posted 2011-03-22 03:27 PM

Thanks for sharing Ateague, I really enjoyed this.

It's not easy being evil, in a world gone to hell.

XGarapanX
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since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

5 posted 2011-03-25 08:40 AM

For myself, I am a great fan of short, meaningful and impactful poems. Well done.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

Haf_Alive
Member

since 2011-09-04

Posts 56
High in the Sky

6 posted 2011-09-05 01:10 PM

i think that's why they steal hearts, because they don't intend on returning them whole.

ponderthepoetorrsx
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since 2011-06-25

Posts 284
U.S , Ca

7 posted 2011-09-05 05:25 PM

very satisfied after reading this poem great job

rachel_anubis
Junior Member

since 2011-03-24

Posts 43

8 posted 2011-09-08 01:49 AM

Short and not very sweet, but very true. You captured feeling in little time. Well done.

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