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| Dark Poetry #5 |
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The Feeling |
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angelfacegurl Member
since 2008-04-17
Posts 67Swartz Creek, MI 
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The feeling if being there The felling of showing they care The feeling of peace The feeling of relief These are my feelings today but tomorrow they'll be the same ole way The feeling of being ignored The feeling of being non adored The feeling of unwantedness The feeling of sadness The light turns on and burns out The weak and dryness of drought The flower grows then dies To feel smaller in size To be the last one heard Flying away like a wingless bird Suffering form experience Living full of conquience Lock my feelings away Put on and smile and go thought out my day But i feel one day my time will come When i can feel like someone |
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angelfacegurl Member
since 2008-04-17
Posts 67Swartz Creek, MI |
didnt really like this one Brittany |
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Def-init Member
since 2008-12-03
Posts 186Toronto, Canada |
"These are my feelings today but tomorrow they'll be the same ole way The light turns on and burns out The weak and dryness of drought But i feel one day my time will come When i can feel like someone" I was feeling these lines in your work. The rest didn't quite grab me. The rhyme scheme in this piece is simple yet effective. Not a bad read by any means though. - If I cant bend Heaven, I shall move Hell - |
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