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White Lie |
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pyre Member
since 2008-05-16
Posts 136 |
I have found that promised land And it needs cleaning up The devils have their toils The work of bending minds And destroying lives Toil on toiling forever Until its pouring clay Inside infernal boilers Christ dismissed I never imagined this Let Him prove himself Again and again Does she pray, or am I prey? |
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Def-init Member
since 2008-12-03
Posts 186Toronto, Canada |
I feel what you are trying to say in your piece. Not a bad poem by any means. I just feel it is lacking something. But I also cant quite place what it is.... - If I cant bend Heaven, I shall move Hell - |
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since 2008-05-16
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