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fractal007
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since 2000-06-01
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0 posted 2009-09-06 12:33 PM


victim is a label which cannot arise from within
you were not hit or raped as a child

so often I fall prey to pain, sadness, and grief

you had it good
I was raped
he was scorned
we raised you away from all that


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heartofsteel
Junior Member
since 2009-09-07
Posts 13
Oregon, USA
1 posted 2009-09-07 10:54 PM


Wow honestly a great piece of work!
I adore how you can use such few words and thrust so much impact, so much meaning onto me.
This was the best poem i have read in awhile.
please keep writing!

May fates path fulfill your dreams.

fractal007
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958

2 posted 2009-09-08 12:54 PM


Hey HeartofSteel:
Thanks for the compliments man(or are u a lady?)  I wrote this actually after reading a book on psychoanalysis and its relation to love not coming properly from the parents of children.  I liked the way the book took seriously the impact that simple emotional gestures can have but I also realized that a lot of the patients discussed weren't victims of horrible things like rape or violence though they might have been victims of psychological assault.  So this poem is my way of asking Does that make such victims' pain less of a concern?


Def-init
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since 2008-12-03
Posts 186
Toronto, Canada
3 posted 2009-09-19 09:22 AM


Very nice Frac. This piece indeed makes you stop and think. Again, very nice.

- If I cant bend Heaven, I shall move Hell -

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