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vampirelover Member
since 2009-05-17
Posts 74 |
It’s not lonely here inside it’s where I abide the place that I know, where I’m safe to reside I’ve been here all my life. Familiar sounds heart beating mother’s breathing eating and drinking I live in water but I don’t drown in here it’s where I’ve grown where I’m safe. Music appears comes from Outside words I don’t understand. My hand, my face it’s my Land, it’s everywhere I know, I’m so small but I’m loved by Her. She’s below above and beyond me She is all there is I am warm and whole. Her soul is one with mine…….. WHAT IS HAPPENING? The thunder The tearing The Dreadful Pain……….. Mother, why do you kill me? |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
This needs to be said and you did it so well. Thank you! God bless, Rae |
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vampirelover Member
since 2009-05-17
Posts 74 |
Thank you,Rae,that means a lot to me. |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
vampirelover, Welcome to PiP. This is powerful stuff you are sharing with us. I have to tell you that you are making me think and I thank you for that. I am reminded that I don't have to like all poetry to appreciate it. Actually, if I said I liked it I think you would think I was lying anyway. I like the structure of your poetry - I hate the messages they contain. That, to me, is what makes your writing powerful. Welcome. Alison |
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vampirelover Member
since 2009-05-17
Posts 74 |
Thanks, Alison. I am grateful for your positive comments, especially as you are not empathetic to my point of view.I am puzzled, however, when you state that you "hate" the message; I would be interested to learn what you mean by that. I have a couple of poems in "behind closed doors". If you have the time to look at them, I would be interested to hear what you think. I've had one pulled by the censors; I have a feeling the others may go the same way! |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Hi VL, Thank you for asking for clarification in regards to my comment to your poem. In my opinion, a poem is not good or bad based on whether I like the subject matter or hate it. I think a poem is good when it gets a reaction from me. I reacted to this poem. While I enjoyed the style in which you wrote it, I hated the content. It has nothing to do with my opinion of abortion, but everything to do with how you humanized the fetus. I don't hate what you did. I hate what happened in your poem. Does that make more sense? I hated the story. That does not mean that I dismiss your poem or find it poor qaulity. I hope that helps explain what I meant. What did Dr. Suess say? "I meant what I said and I said what I meant and an elephant's faithful 100%" - or something like that. Bet you never thought Dr. Suess would be in a reply to this poem. But I do mean what I said and I did say what I meant ... I just don't always make sense. Anyway, I am tired - it's been a very long day. Good writing. I'll read more. Your poetry makes me squirm, but, so far, I have found the message within them to be pretty important. Alison |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
I love a poem that gets my controversial issues senses tingling. |
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vampirelover Member
since 2009-05-17
Posts 74 |
To Alison: "Humanized the foetus"?? Are you saying that a baby in the womb is not human? I find that most bizarre. I would say rather that I have given her an intelligence and power of speech that, obviously,are beyond her, which is poetic licence. But her humanity is surely beyond doubt. |
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Make me laugh New Member
since 2009-06-06
Posts 3 |
I think you should have made it more intense |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Now I truly love your presence on this forum. You aren't afraid to place yourself as a writer in a position of great angst. You lay bare issues that wrench the hearts of both liberals and conservatives alike. Life's short. Think hard! |
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vampirelover Member
since 2009-05-17
Posts 74 |
Thank you, MML. Usually I'm told I go too far!! |
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vampirelover Member
since 2009-05-17
Posts 74 |
Many thanks, fractal. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Told you go too far? I don't think so, VampireLover. This forum needs more writers like you imho. *ducks worrying he'll get hate mail from moderators now  *I don't know how old you are, but a lot of your writing sounds familiar to me -- like a style I used to write in when I was around 19 or 20. I was very depressed then, a Christian in doubt and leaning closer to atheism. Poetry was my outlet. I guess that's what attracts me to these poems of yours. Life's short. Think hard! |
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