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Cocaine |
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Kitherion Member
since 2006-08-01
Posts 181Johannesburg |
The tiny plastic packages, Contain my very essence, The simplistic joy, Of my dangerous addiction. One, Two, Three, These lines and I am sated. An hour passes, It felt like a minute, And there lurking in the corner, Is my dangerous addiction. One, Two, Three, These lines and I am sated. Giggling like idiots, Numbness spreading through my blood, This little white heaven that calls me, My dangerous addiction. One, Two, Three, These lines and I am dead. "Our Father who art in Heaven... Hallowed be thy name..." |
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youhurtmeagain New Member
since 2009-04-23
Posts 9 |
Very nice... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Well, if you have to ask?   There's just something about that particular drug...I think it's pretty much evil, m'self. Just because it makes everything feel so right--in the moment. I don't miss it m'self, but I enjoyed the construction you utilized here--although I haven't heard of coke referred to in "lines" for nearly two decades, it's rather clever.  And when in reference to cocaine? Repetition always works. *laughing* I'll have a cup of coffee though. And two's the limit!  |
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prize Member
since 2008-11-21
Posts 116 |
Thanks for your poem, I really can relate and it is well written, great style. It makes a lot of sense to me since I know too much about illegal substances myself. Your poem reminded me of my past and inspired me to post the poem 'slave' when I remembered how much drugs controlled me. ~P |
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wolfy09 Member
since 2008-06-10
Posts 93 |
i really liked reading this poem. i may not be able to relate personally but it was good to read |
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Def-init Member
since 2008-12-03
Posts 186Toronto, Canada |
I can relate to this poem 100%. It was a great read. Coke can be such a life altering drug, even more so when you don't have any left... I hope you have finally been able to beat this powerful influence on one's life. - If I cant bend Heaven, I shall move Hell - |
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Bob K Member Elite
since 2007-11-03
Posts 4208 |
Walking down Scott Headed up Main Looking for that girl Who sells cocaine Cocaine! Running all 'round my brain. Cocaine! Running all 'round my brain. Looking for Helen Spending time with Sue Can't tell the difference Between the two Cocaine! Running all 'round my brain. Cocaine! Running all 'round my brain. —Traditional blues Lots of good recordings, lots of good singers, lots of ruined lives. I like a Jackson Browne version, especially, though I don't know if he has any Coke History. I think Dave van Ronk has a good version as well. More verses than you can shake a stick at, more variation for any of them than you could count. You've got a decent poem here. Bob Kaven |
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