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pyre
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0 posted 2009-03-02 07:24 PM



Black and white
With a bit of red
Anger and rage
Hateful prudent spite
Wishing of the dead
Bit of a twisted cage

Keep twisting
Get out
Be free of that coffen
Mesh over weave
Breathable coffen
Destroying me
Beautiful coffen

Convey the truth to me
Let me know if the nails hurt
Center me over you
I'll make those nails hurt
Thick and rich
Nails struck by the world

Don't try to understand
Just accept that you can't
And keep going
Just keep going

Does she pray, or am I prey?  

© Copyright 2009 Kenneth Craig Rogers - All Rights Reserved
SlowlyFallAway
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since 2008-08-29
Posts 279
North Carolina
1 posted 2009-03-04 06:05 AM


For a piece so dark, I must say I enjoyed the last stanza the best... inspirational.
Def-init
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since 2008-12-03
Posts 186
Toronto, Canada
2 posted 2009-03-04 12:56 PM


"Black and white
With a bit of red
Anger and rage
Hateful prudent spite
Wishing of the dead
Bit of a twisted cage

Keep twisting
Get out
Be free of that coffen
Mesh over weave
Breathable coffen
Destroying me
Beautiful coffen"

I like the wordplay used in this piece.
you deffo are gettin better!

- If I cant bend Heaven, I shall move Hell -

pyre
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since 2008-05-16
Posts 136

3 posted 2009-03-08 05:44 PM


Thank you.  Business suits freak me out a bit.

pyre

Does she pray, or am I prey?  

pyre
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since 2008-05-16
Posts 136

4 posted 2010-02-21 10:35 PM


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