Acid Rain (Stitching The Affliction)

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Dark Poetry #5

Acid Rain (Stitching The Affliction)

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

0 posted 2009-03-01 02:45 AM

WOW.. it's been a while since i posted in here i think... I guess you could call this dark lol.. It's a poem that is better when its read quickly. Probably very dodgey compared to the talent we have in here... Oh for those of you who don't guess it.. this is about that friend all of us seems to have.. the one people tell you is lying and is generally a bad person but you give them the benift of the doubt but get burned in the long run..

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Stop with the apprehensions their eating me inside
With every tormenting emotion that you make me hide
These long lasting promises that I’ve left for dead
Here take the gun.. put a bullet in your head

I cry out these tears and they burn like acid rain
This never-ending spectacle of blood forsaken pain
It’s shallow, hateful and it’s misunderstood
It’s blunt and it’s brutal and I’d escape if I could

But you’re not my friend and I don’t really care
You’re just a fragmented affliction and some stranger’s affair
So crawl back in your box cause I’m done with the lies
I’m really sick of listening to your blood-curdling cries

This affliction is closing I’m stitching it now
So stop with the jealousy you ungrateful cow
And as for our friendships well it’s over and done
This war is ending and guess what I won!

Quail
New Member

since 2009-02-22

Posts 9

1 posted 2009-03-01 02:54 PM

WOOOOO that was awesome I could feel the emotion in there, very well done!

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

2 posted 2009-03-03 10:02 PM

Fantastically written Jess (but that's nothing new).

Emmalee Janelle
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Reborn_Phoenix
Junior Member

since 2009-03-04

Posts 11

3 posted 2009-03-04 01:45 AM

That was a great write. I really felt the emotion and passion you expressed through your piece.

Again I say, great poem.

Rocheal
Junior Member

since 2009-03-15

Posts 25

4 posted 2009-03-15 10:27 PM

Awesome ending to a very well written poem! I felt the emotion and loved reading it.

Suncleaver
Member

since 2009-01-18

Posts 481
Stafford England

5 posted 2009-03-16 05:31 PM

A nice dark write RevengeisMine.

You're venom is pretty potent, I wouldn't wish to get on the wrong side of you.

Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told.

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