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Suncleaver
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since 2009-01-18
Posts 481
Stafford England

0 posted 2009-02-26 03:47 PM


This pen can only recall tragedy
And etch every word in red
As an expression of pain infliction
To myself as my veins are bled.

Eyes that observe a corrugated world,
A hand that copies, not creates
Endless dark and mirror of my black soul,
Reflections of a sphere of hate.

Sublime seraphic light that could have saved
Lies forgotten in shallow earth,
Another verse to the same bitter song
Sung to the tragic poets dearth.


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SlowlyFallAway
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since 2008-08-29
Posts 279
North Carolina
1 posted 2009-02-28 03:23 AM


"A hand that copies, not creates"

Maybe I'm dark at heart, but I loved this, rhyme scheme and all.

Def-init
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since 2008-12-03
Posts 186
Toronto, Canada
2 posted 2009-02-28 02:15 PM


"This pen can only recall tragedy
And etch every word in red
As an expression of pain infliction
To myself as my veins are bled."

Nice man.
I like the variation you have in this stanza.

- If I cant bend Heaven, I shall move Hell -

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