Open Poetry #43 |
Soup |
XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia |
A shrill cry made me look to the sky, where a hawk was attacking a starling A dull thud made me look to the ground, where the injured starling had fallen A shrill cry was heard to come from the bird whenever it tried to return to the sky Without pre- conceived notions I watched every motion and waited to be shown the "why" For three days I watched as the fallen fowl struggled through it's trauma A dull thud announced that the cat had pounced and brought an end to the drama An easy meal prepared for a starving soul. The table and stage were set by Grace. I sat on the porch, sipping soup from my bowl, with a smile upon my face. *** |
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CrazyHorse Junior Member
since 2008-08-23
Posts 31New-Brunswick, Canada |
Amazing job. i would love to be able to write about something as simple as the downfall of an animal so purely. The last verse i really enjoy. great imagery. as i've said before, i strongly believe in subtelty and simplicity as essential aspects in writing. Great job. i hope to see more. PS. Great title, by the way! |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
I think I would have been crying in my soup even though I understand the ways of life and grace. It's a good write, my friend! Helen |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I would have been crying with Helen even though I understand too. I like the poem though. Ida |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
And Margherita IS crying together with Helen and Ida, though she knows too ... will never get used to it. So sad, but you said it so well, dear Larry. Love, Margherita "Love is the One who masters all things; |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Although I understand the ways of nature, it still can be very upsetting to my sensibilities. It's dinnertime here and I was in the mood for a nice bowl of soup, so I was surprised when I saw your title. I thought, aha! Let's see what Larry's cookin' up! Oh, my! This wasn't quite what I expected! I think I'll be crying in my soup... Oh, dear! I just had a horrible thought! Since, by the grace of God, Man's at the top of the food chain, did you add the cat to your soup?!? ~ Sorry, I have a weird sense of hooomah. Linda |
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