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Open Poetry #43

frozen expression

poddarku
Senior Member

since 2008-01-15

Posts 589
india

0 posted 2008-08-23 09:13 AM

Frozen expression

He stands there and will be standing so
for eternity. Watching them two leaving.
Listening to losing love and sounds of soft grass
being trampled by a pair of angry woman’s feet
and a pair of tiny ones following.
He suddenly realizes they have gone.
Obliterated. He still is standing there as it is.
Frozen, cemented, stony.
Expressions of agony immortalized.
His eyes are shedding tears.
A bird ventures. Another one sits on him.
They are tired from their journey.
They take a bath dipping in the water of soul.
He soaks all the tiredness from the universe.

clever talks delay friendship!

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2008-08-23 09:21 AM

Ku, I am shaking all over for the intensity of this newest of your incredibly touching poems!
IT IS A MASTERPIECE!!!

A keeper, a sad sad one, but ever so breathtakingly beautifully written.

Love you, dear Ku Poet.

Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

2 posted 2008-08-23 01:53 PM

Echoing all Margherita said. Intensely beautiful, intensely sad, and yes, most definitely a masterpiece.

Hugs
- Owl

DreamerSpirit
Member

since 2006-10-02

Posts 240
Buenos Aires, Argentina

3 posted 2008-08-23 07:53 PM

lots of feelings in those words.
loved this one.

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

4 posted 2008-08-23 08:47 PM

Yo Poddarku,

I'm still trying to figure this good poem of yours out.

This is lovely work.

Bobby

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

5 posted 2008-08-24 08:35 PM

Pretty intense, Ku. Just the sort of poem I like.
Ida

DreamerSpirit
Member

since 2006-10-02

Posts 240
Buenos Aires, Argentina

6 posted 2008-08-24 08:50 PM

Excellent write, i loved it.
a lot of feelings.
thanks for sharing!

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