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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Dawn creeps in, out of the night, slowly, carefully, shoes in hand, like a wayward husband after a night on the town... I am already awake, just listening to the quiet, enjoying the stillness before the day begins to assert itself. Ida Werrett |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
lovely comparison, beautiful personification of the dawn, I enjoyed too the music of the poem... regards yann |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Mmmmmm . . . lovely! Ida, this is so my kind of poem! Thankkk youuuu! - Owl |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A perfect little gem ... I feel like tiptoeing out of the stillness you conveyed so beautifully ... back into the noise of the day. Love, Margherita |
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Gaelynsgirl Member
since 2008-07-18
Posts 175Ont. Canada |
This is wonderful Ida! You know the dawn well, I can tell. I love the similie of a wayward husband creeping in. You have painted with this poem a wonderful image of the dawn's entrance. Lynda |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Ida, This would be made a little better by getting rid of the "But", and putting a strophe break after "town." The idea behind it is great. Love Bobby |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Thank you, Bobby. I think you're right. Ida |
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PrestonThePoet Member
since 2007-11-07
Posts 87 |
man, your poems are prolly some of my favorites. You're officially my pip favorite poem. |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Hi Ida, I like this idea too. If Dawn was a wayward husband. Wow…Prasad "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
VERY well done! a most fine impression of the time of day that hints at new promise... applause!! |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Lovely, Ida. It's only in the quiet that we can hear the whispers of our own inner voice but sometimes the day intrudes before we've tuned in. I guess we miss a lot of sound advice. Helen |
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Spuddette Member
since 2008-07-03
Posts 112England |
This is perfect. Well done. xxxjanetxxx |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
liked it  |
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The Shadow in Blue Member
since 2006-05-18
Posts 493EL, Michigan |
Dawn is a beautiful time. You wrote a warm, serene piece. Enjoyed. J. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
I love to watch dawn rise just at the end of night. If I can stay up mind you... lol Loved the write Marchmadness! ARCTIC WIND |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Thank you all for the kind comments. This little poem just kind of came to me as I was waking up yesterday. I guess a lot of people enjoy the dawn as much as I do. Ida |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Oh my, this is just beautiful! |
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