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Margherita
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0 posted 2008-07-27 05:42 AM




*   *   *
Those words of negativity
deposit on her shoulders
like adamant particles of dust.
More and more energy
is needed to shake them off
in the very moment
when they attempt to cling ...
After years of denigration
her wings now are encrusted,
she can spread them no more.

She still remembers though
that she was meant to soar ...

*   *   *


© Copyright 2008 Margherita Rueger - All Rights Reserved
OwlSA
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1 posted 2008-07-27 05:45 AM


And hopefully she will, in your next poem, despite the encrustation . . .

Lovely characterisation of the picture, Margherita.

- Owl

Margherita
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2 posted 2008-07-27 05:47 AM


Thank you, dear Diana! The picture was found to match the words ...

Love,
Margherita

OwlSA
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3 posted 2008-07-27 06:23 AM


That makes sense!  As much as I love the picture, I love the poem more.

- Owl

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2008-07-27 06:41 AM


but does her mind fly ms....
Margherita
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5 posted 2008-07-27 06:47 AM


Thank you, dear D., yes, there is salvation in the power of the mind to detach ... but it can be very hard work at times.

Love,
Margherita

Robert E. Jordan
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6 posted 2008-07-27 08:35 AM


Yo dear Margherita,

Oh oh, someone's having a bad day.

She'll just have to get over it Hon.

Love Bobby

amusemi
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7 posted 2008-07-27 09:19 AM


There certainly are days like that...a very poignant write.
XGarapanX
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8 posted 2008-07-27 10:50 AM


I love it! How profoundly sad. Makes a dude want to break out his dust buster and go to work!

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·

BluesSerenade
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9 posted 2008-07-27 12:39 PM


Such a heartfelt write from you, Margherita.

A tear jerker to be sure, however I always find some comfort in your poetry.  

Prasad Nataraj
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10 posted 2008-07-27 01:54 PM


Hi Margherita, negativity is bad and it has more side effects than direct effects. Wishing her positive energy. Prasad

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

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11 posted 2008-07-27 03:03 PM


I believe, Margherita.

I believe she will again.  Just as I did when I was a little girl when I clapped for Tinkerbell, I clap and believe.

She will soar again.

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12 posted 2008-07-27 03:19 PM


::smiles::   she will soar on new wings
I still clap.   I still believe I believe.

Honeybunch
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13 posted 2008-07-27 04:02 PM


Dear Margherita - this poem came as a bit of a surprise but it's a true reflection of how we can all feel sometimes.  I have recently felt like that myself but when we remember what we were meant to do, we have no option but to get up and get on with the doing.  When I was younger I used to spring up but now it takes a little longer perhaps because I think more now than I used to.  Oh, for the good old days!

Hugs
Helen  

Margherita
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14 posted 2008-07-27 04:40 PM


Thank you all from my heart, my dear Poet friends! Your kindness is felt.
A hug to each of you.
Love,
Margherita


LindsayP
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15 posted 2008-07-28 12:06 PM



Dear Margherita, that is such a sweet tender poem and I think one of your best,

Thanks for sharing it with us.  Love

Lindsay

apes531
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16 posted 2008-07-28 12:08 PM


i really liked this poem..
good write

(comment and read my poems tell me what  you think about my writtings im new here)

Marchmadness
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17 posted 2008-07-28 12:15 PM


I think this is one of your best, Margharita.
Just beautiful.
                      Ida

HopeS
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18 posted 2008-07-28 02:05 AM


This is so touching and heartfelt


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19 posted 2008-07-28 07:30 AM


now...this...

this was surely meant for me in a certain beautiful way



Margherita
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20 posted 2008-07-28 01:18 PM


Thank you from my heart for your kind and generous comments, my friends.

Love,
Margherita

Artic Wind
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21 posted 2008-07-28 06:34 PM


Heartfelt Write Indeed!



ARCTIC WIND

nourzihane
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22 posted 2008-07-29 02:00 PM


when breath it .. eat it and drink it
when its black clouds stands obstacl between us and between Sunshine whitch was shine our faces every morning
We do not have to write about anything else because we do not know except it
the happiness.. the joy.. the optimism
All words become strange as for us
vocabularies of language we ignore it
maybe we all remember that we know it oneday
but taste of our mouth at pronunciation is bitter by it
like mouth's taste when we wake after we ate sweets in the morning and forget to wash our hands.
this is the sadness

************************
thank you margherita for your subject

nourzihane

nourzihane
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23 posted 2008-07-29 02:02 PM


when the  sadness enter into ourslves
when we breath it .. we eat it and we drink it
when its black clouds stands obstacl between us and between Sunshine of the sun whitch was shine our faces every morning
We do not have to write about anything else because we do not know except it
the happiness.. the joy.. the optimism
All words become stranger as for us
vocabularies of language we ignore it
maybe we all remember that we know it oneday
but taste of our mouth at pronunciation is bitter by it
like mouth's taste when we wake after we ate sweets in the morning and we forget to wash our teeth this is the sadness

************************
thank you margherita for your subject

nourzihane



[This message has been edited by nourzihane (07-30-2008 04:14 AM).]

Misty Lilacs
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24 posted 2008-07-29 04:43 PM


I loved this piece so much. Many times I have felt this way and it is not a happy feeling. Can I come and Swiffer off your wings?
Juju
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25 posted 2008-07-29 08:46 PM


Simply Lovely.


Juju

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Who thinks really deep thougts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

peaceseaker
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26 posted 2009-07-31 08:28 AM


Margherita...this was absolutely beautiful and oh so tender and touching in the imagery from your pen...truly enjoyed..and love the picture..but I have always been intrigued with art of ballet....I hope to right one soon as well about this very thing....peaceseaker
Margherita
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27 posted 2009-07-31 05:25 PM


Thank you, dear peaceseaker, for telling me you appreciated this write.
It is also a reminder for me today ... to remember that I am meant to soar!

Thank you! Looking forward to reading your poems.

Love,
Margherita

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