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XGarapanX
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since 2008-06-19

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0 posted 2008-07-23 10:29 PM

Hannah's Song

They think they can see me,
They think they know.
No one really knows
How I feel.
Carrying these thoughts alone--
The weight of them
Bows my head
Sometimes.

I can smile,
And look them in the eye.
But it's not really me,
As I force this cage of skin
To appear
How they want it to seem.
But the effort of that smile
Nearly breaks me.

"You are young, Hannah,"
They say.
"You are beautiful,"
They flatter.
Do these things really matter
Against this burden
That I feel inside?

Then I hear a song
In the distance.
It triggers those sensations
All over again.
The song reminds me
Of something sad
And beautiful
In it's lonliness--

And I know then
That whomever
Wrote that song
Must have been
Walking along this street
Just ahead
Of me.

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*
*

This Poem Was Based Upon The Image Of
Hannah "Squeakbutt"
http://www.freewebs.com/squeakbutt/

© Hannah Sad.jpg 2008
By Hannah "Squeakbutt"

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`·

Alison

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since 2008-01-27

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1 posted 2008-07-23 11:03 PM

I remember feeling just like this. You made me smile and think how happy I am not to be that age now.

Alison

XGarapanX
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2 posted 2008-07-23 11:26 PM

lol! thanks. I have to put myself in the place of my subjects, and thankfully, I think I somehow manage it.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`·

LindsayP
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since 2007-07-28

Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria

3 posted 2008-07-23 11:56 PM

Keep smiling Garapan and if you smile long enough, your sad feelings will dissolve

and you will feel better for it.
I enjoyed the post.

Lindsay

Indigo
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since 2001-05-17

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4 posted 2008-07-24 12:32 PM

XX-
Not sure how you managed to come across that website :-) but I absolutely adore your connection to the feelings this image inspires.

Indigo

XGarapanX
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5 posted 2008-07-24 03:25 AM

Honored! Thank you.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`·

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

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6 posted 2008-07-24 07:44 AM

Fine writing...James

scorpio eyes shut
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since 2008-07-24

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7 posted 2008-07-24 08:16 AM

very hearfelt. makes me feel glad i am not (that)young!

kaile

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8 posted 2008-07-24 11:09 AM

the heartache. a poem which everyone can relate to...

Artic Wind
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9 posted 2008-07-24 02:33 PM

Touching Write!

ARCTIC WIND

XGarapanX
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10 posted 2008-07-24 02:53 PM

Thank you all for reading this.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`·

Ericc
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11 posted 2008-07-24 04:07 PM

Wow...!!

Eric

XGarapanX
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12 posted 2008-07-24 05:07 PM

Coming from you, Mr. Eric, I will take that as a wow.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`·

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

13 posted 2008-07-24 05:15 PM

Yo XGarapanX,

This is a pretty picture of a pretty girl. Tell her not to be sad.

I like this poem a lot, it goes well with the picture.

Bobby

XGarapanX
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14 posted 2008-07-24 05:17 PM

Thank you, Bobby. I will tell her exactly that. She eagerly awaits the reviews on this piece.

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Spuddette
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since 2008-07-03

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15 posted 2008-07-24 05:44 PM

How unique the loneliness of youth is to each of us. xxxJanetxxx

vandana

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16 posted 2008-07-24 06:15 PM

good read

XGarapanX
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17 posted 2008-07-24 07:11 PM

Yes, and thank you.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`·

Prasad Nataraj
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since 2008-05-29

Posts 1149
Bangalore,India

18 posted 2008-07-26 07:05 AM

Hi Garapan, I agree with Bobby, the picture is good and so is the poem, it goes well with the picture. Prasad

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

XGarapanX
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19 posted 2008-07-26 07:41 AM

Thank you, Prasad. I find a picture that speaks to me, and write the poem based on what I see, so to hear your comment verifies for me that I have found the common theme.

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