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YoungatHeart2
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since 2008-12-12

Posts 81

0 posted 2008-12-18 08:42 PM

To all the terrific writers in this forum:

Oh I wish I had the talent,
to write beautiful poetry as you do.
Your words, your thoughts and ideas
seem to come very easy for you.

Some of you are all so clever;
you spin tales that are extremely fine.
The endings are not predictable;
caught by surprise with that final line.

Many of you write with humor;
your readers can't help but smile.
How do you stay so upbeat?
Joking and teasing's your style.

Others of you are solemn;
sensitivity and feelings allowed.
Your verse is deep and meaningful;
love, joy and loneliness abound.

As much as I really want to;
writing poetry won't be my forte.
I will just be content and visit;
to enjoy your superb writing all day.

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

1 posted 2008-12-18 09:02 PM

would you permit me to add my voice to yours? I do so relate...I find myself so often in awe at the amazing talent here at PiP. Thank you for verbalizing it for the rest of us. Meanwhile, we can but try...there is so much inspiration to be found on these blue pages. Once again, thanks...

YoungatHeart2
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since 2008-12-12

Posts 81

2 posted 2008-12-18 09:07 PM

Oh Steven. Are you kidding me....you are one of the ones for whom I wrote this!!!!!!!

SEA

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since 2000-01-18

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with you

3 posted 2008-12-18 09:40 PM

seriously, this is a really great poem and very nice

There are so many that make it look so easy....I agree totally

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

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4 posted 2008-12-18 10:00 PM

Young,
don't fool yourself...SEA is dead-on right...you are very good...humility is a suit not worn well by most, but it is obvious you have real talent...(oh, and thank you for your humble opinion)...then again, opinions (like the wise man said) are like armpits...everybody's got one (cleaned up version, btw)

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

5 posted 2008-12-18 10:26 PM

YoungatHeart2 - enjoyed this writing. Don't just visit but keep writing. I find it difficult at times to write, nothing easy, but it comes from inside...

BC

YoungatHeart2
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since 2008-12-12

Posts 81

6 posted 2008-12-19 04:47 AM

Thank you, Stevenr, SEA and Bill for being kind enough to read my poem and pausing to give me positive feedback. I do appreciate it very much.

YoungatHeart2
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since 2008-12-12

Posts 81

7 posted 2008-12-19 04:49 AM

oh gosh...I can't spell either....steavnr...sorry

OldPalOldBuddy
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since 2008-12-13

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8 posted 2008-12-19 08:47 AM

Nice little poem there, young lady.

moonbeam

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since 2005-12-24

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9 posted 2008-12-19 09:56 AM

quote:
Oh I wish I had the talent,

Actually, wishing is good, it indicates desire.

Doing something about making the wish come true is even better.

And you CAN you know.

Sure, "talent" helps in writing: some people have a natural gift for stringing together words in an inspirational way.  But talent is only quite a small part of being able to write very good poetry.

You can LEARN, believe it or not.  As with anything worthwhile it takes hard work and time though.

Reading good poetry, noting what makes you tingle with excitement is a great start.  Get hold of some poetry anthologies and read read read.  Second, get a poetry handbook.  One that isn't too heavy and makes learning fun - personally I love this one:

http://www.amazon.com/Palm-Your-Hand-Portable-Workshop/dp/0884481492

Do all the exercises in that book diligently, and I guarantee that by spring you'll be writing as well as the best here at PiP.

Finally, you know what caught my eye about your poem above?  Not the music of it, nor the beauty of the syntax, nor even the message, but simply the fact that you took CARE.

You show by the way you take care to punctuate and spell correctly that you respect language and the tools of your trade: words.  That is one heck of a good start on your poetic career.

Good luck.

YoungatHeart2
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since 2008-12-12

Posts 81

10 posted 2008-12-21 09:33 AM

Thank you, Moonbeam, for your suggestions.

nakdthoughts
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11 posted 2008-12-21 04:32 PM

I enjoyed your poem and hope you continue to express yourself with us.

M

Earth Angel
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12 posted 2008-12-21 05:43 PM

I do so know what you mean!!! ~ and very well expressed, might I add!

I love this place ~ and the poets! You have beautifully expressed your appreciation of the vast variety of poetic dishes available aboard the pip ship Lollypip! I totally concur!!!

Please be a regular contributor, yourself! I enjoyed your poem!!!

Giving you a warm, welcoming, pip hug,

Earth Angel

YoungatHeart2
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since 2008-12-12

Posts 81

13 posted 2008-12-23 08:17 PM

Thank you both.

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