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Juju
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since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

0 posted 2008-12-16 08:47 PM

Roses are Real

Have you ever chased a rainbow?

The moist air had clung to my skin
Uneven paths swallowed my feet
And when progress was made I saw
What I wanted was out of reach.

Even so the sun still shown down
And I could feel warmth in its stead.
The rain’s smell evaporated
And disappeared into the wind

I fell in love with the flower

I could feel their velvet petals,
The razor-sharp pierce of a thorn,
All proof enough it existed.

Proof I existed
Was the roses…

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

[This message has been edited by Juju (12-16-2008 10:54 PM).]

Vestibular Bard
Member

since 2008-12-11

Posts 284
New York

1 posted 2008-12-16 08:53 PM

Wow!

What an incredibly powerful, mesmerizing, existential verse.

It has the texture of silk.
I absolutely loved it.

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

2 posted 2008-12-16 09:04 PM

Yo dear Juli,

Nice rainbow poem. This works very well.

It puts me in mind of a rainbow incident. I'll do a poem about it.

Love Bobby

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

3 posted 2008-12-16 09:06 PM

Thanks Bobby!!!

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

4 posted 2008-12-16 11:08 PM

certainly another view, an excellent premise in an excellent write...love your last phrase:

"Proof I existed
Was the roses…" ...so very existential

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

5 posted 2008-12-17 06:19 PM

Juju - yes, I've chased the rainbow, and touched the rose, lovely touching write...

BC

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

6 posted 2008-12-19 10:04 AM

J-dizzle,

This was excellent, and struck a nerve with me.

-Paula

Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

7 posted 2008-12-19 10:58 AM

Beautiful reality skillfully illustrated!

Eric

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

8 posted 2008-12-19 06:22 PM

.

Where did this come
from Juju?

It's not your usual . . .

Something is going on . . .

This is very very good.

I would like to include this
in my Word file of Poems by Others
with your permission . . .

Under what name?

Again, very very good.

John

.
John

Rick
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia

9 posted 2008-12-19 07:07 PM

You do indeed belong with the beauty of roses my friend, I was looking for that treasure at the end of the rainbow with you in this, finding your words were the reward; then wakened by the thorns. Enjoyed this read Juju, and your way of expression. Thank you for sharing.

Rick

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

10 posted 2008-12-19 09:15 PM

This is indeed very good, JuJu.

Big wows from me, and this one assures that I'll be checking out all of your stuff from here on.

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

11 posted 2008-12-23 06:54 PM

Loved the new font you used! ~ Really suits the poem that you have written!
Did I mention I like your new photo?!?

ARCTIC WIND

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