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Open Poetry #43

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Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

0 posted 2008-12-13 02:22 PM

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Shuttered
Windows
Spider webs
Under
Wooden eaves

No one
Of course
Comes here
Anymore

And yet
Late at night
When the wind
Is summer soft
And a new moon
Glows

While small stars
Waltz above
The fragrant grass
On the long
Backyard

Glints of light
In the fireplace

A creaking
Of the stairs

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[This message has been edited by Huan Yi (12-13-2008 04:29 PM).]

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

1 posted 2008-12-13 04:03 PM

two minor questions:

1. was this intended to be 'shuttered' windows?

2. by 'new moon' may we assume that this does
   not refer literally to the actual 'new moon' phase
   occurring when it passes between the earth
   and the sun (as it is typically invisible rather
   than glowing during said phase)?

I am particularly fond of:

"Late at night
When the wind
Is summer soft
And a new moon
Glows"

and the ending:

"Glints of light
In the fireplace

A creaking
Of the stairs"

much applause for this 'penning'!

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

2 posted 2008-12-13 04:30 PM

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Bruce,

Yes to both.
Thanks for the catch.

John

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

3 posted 2008-12-14 05:00 AM

enjoy very much atmosphere and write...

yann

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

4 posted 2008-12-14 06:58 AM

quote:
While small stars
Waltz above
The fragrant grass
On the long
Backyard

And with these words you remove all the cobwebs that linger somewhere ...

Very nice.

Love,
Margherita

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