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CrazyHorse Junior Member
since 2008-08-23
Posts 31New-Brunswick, Canada |
Let’s say I’m just a picture Let’s say I’m just a thought Making my way through your heart’s tunnel vision Before I end up getting caught Let’s say I’ve got a vision Let’s say I can sort of see You paving one Hell of a road With or without me And let’s say I want to do that But let’s say I don’t know how Well, I’m feelin’ like a bad decision Feelin’ like I’ve already gone somehow Let’s say I kind of cheated Before I even learned the game Let’s say I’m doubting myself Let’s say you’re doubting the same Let’s say the only love song I’ve written Is sung in the past tense And let’s say, though I wrote every word, They still don’t make much sense Let’s say I’m feelin’ different Let’s say I’m feelin’ steered Let’s say I’ve got all the friends I need Jotted down ’tween these lines right here Let’s say I’m disoriented Let’s say I’ve won what I’ve lost Let’s say I’m overreacting And what the Hell is a paradox? Let’s say I’m lookin’ forward But let’s say it’s already right here Let’s say the past is forever Well, let’s not and pretend it ain’t there |
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Arius Miura de Galdri Member
since 2007-07-04
Posts 90Michigan, USA |
I really enjoyed this poem, particularly the last stanza (even more particularly the last two lines). Great work! AMdG "My candle burns at both ends; it will not last the night; but ah, my foes, and oh, my friends--it gives a lovely light!" -Edna St. Vincent Millay |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
interesting take, good cadence...nice write...loved your ending, and this line: "Let’s say the only love song I’ve written Is sung in the past tense" ...if I haven't said welcome to PiP, then I do now |
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