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Open Poetry #43

Hope

Freely_expressing
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since 2008-10-16

Posts 69
NSW, Australia

0 posted 2008-12-03 08:23 PM

A momentary glimmer
Of evaporating light
Shines as the sky comes dimmer
And the fearless turn to fright
My soul extends beyond my eyes
Pure hands that won’t destroy
To grasp life’s breath that is its prize
Before darkness smothers joy

Soft in my palm, the seed of life
This coolly blazing ember
The Guardian against dark strife
“Dawn will come!” I remember
The light expands, pulsing bright
Rapt faces, all forget the night

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

1 posted 2008-12-03 11:14 PM

Nice lines like this one:

"My soul extends beyond my eyes"

make this write a pleasure to read

...welcome to PiP

Freely_expressing
Member

since 2008-10-16

Posts 69
NSW, Australia

2 posted 2008-12-04 04:59 AM

Thanks so much!
I'm glad you liked it as I haven't written a sonnet for a while. My imagination has always resonate with the concept of the eyes being the window to the soul.
Regards, Ben

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

3 posted 2008-12-04 01:05 PM

Some very nice lines in this one, Freely,
Enjoyed.
Ida

Freely_expressing
Member

since 2008-10-16

Posts 69
NSW, Australia

4 posted 2008-12-05 02:47 AM

Thanks again Ida!
These last two were rather hurried so lack a little in depth or whatever but i randomly felt the need to write something

hehe
Thanks again for the comment!
BEn

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

5 posted 2008-12-05 07:45 PM

I'd pick the same line Steven chose as my favorite.

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