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She sleeps |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa 
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She sleeps but then awakes to the echo of a need feint like a tinkling bell in the midst of thunder storms. She listens with the ear of one who nestled close to source in the long ago days of yore still recalled unto this day. But tossed within the restlessness of sleep again denied mind relegates the echo to the land of fantasy well known to be a place of infinite beauty. Her smile is tinged with sadness as she formulates new rules but yet and still she’s satisfied that control has come to roost in the sphere of passion’s hold so long an awe inspiring imprisonment. So of echoes then they cease to be when morning shuffles through the trees! Helen / 3 December 2008 |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
nice write...I love your use of words, especially in this phrase: "feint like a tinkling bell in the midst of thunder storms" |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed the Write Dearest Helen!!!  to youARCTIC WIND |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Honeybunch - I also enjoyed this writing... BC |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: I welcome this wonderfully expressed morning together with you, dear Helen. Instead of in "imprisonment", I wish you passion in full freedom. And in sunlight... Beautiful rendering of your "sleep". Love, Margherita  |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
"feint like a tinkling bell in the midst of a thunderstorm." So love this line. Ida |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thanks so much Steaven, Arctic, BC, Margherita and Ida. That was a sleep that wasn't but perhaps tonight it will be one that is. Where there's life, there's hope so where there's night, there's sleep - one hopes.  Helen |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Having had many a restless night where my mind makes rules my heart breaks again even before my teeth are brushed, I can definitely relate! *S* Well written! |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Helen, enjoyed the read my friend, thank you for sharing what the night did bring you. Rick |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Great write Helen dear, so much enjoyed. Have a great day my friend. Love Lindsay |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
What a sensitive and seeing soul you have... and smile, I've got all of that but the trees!  |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
I loved this...beautiful write...kat |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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