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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2008-11-30 02:49 PM

I think that I would rather be
a blind bat in a fly about
or a rat in a scuttle
than a woman in the know
of love’s invisibility.

How tangible and yet unseen
to common folk like you and me
for in the forays of a mind
it plays the game of hide and seek.

Love’s “on” and like a scuttling rat
it moves like lightening “a” to “b”
but blind, you see, just like a bat
it crash lands in a boiling pot
of man-made “mish-mash” stew.

And this stew absorbs the flavour
but too subtle for our taste
it slides down, down, the gullet
to settle finally
into our state of unawareness
where it battles its confinement
amongst life’s trivia.

But confined it is; it’s made to be
patient in the middle tier
and there it waits a thing unknown
for however long it takes
to be fully comprehended.

Love exists alone unused
until I upturn my perceptions
and know it’s not reliant on
a man-made “mish-mash” stew
that seeks to mix ingredients
in a way not intended.

Meat needs an onion, that is true,
but I can eat it plain, un-spiced,
and still be nourished inwardly!

Helen / 30 November 2008
(And I really am trying not to think about love)

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2008-11-30 03:00 PM

Well you are burying it within in this work... Love many of the internal emotions revealed in this.....Great read.

Eric

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

2 posted 2008-11-30 03:08 PM

Thank you, Eric! Your comment is greatly appreciated.

Helen

shortsleeves
Member

since 2008-10-19

Posts 125
Franklin Tennessee

3 posted 2008-11-30 03:31 PM

Beautiful thoughts Helen.
Thank you,
Hal

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

4 posted 2008-11-30 03:52 PM

Thank you, Hal!

Helen

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

5 posted 2008-11-30 05:14 PM

Honey, your closing stanza is the kind of real meat and potatoes ~ down to the basics ~ way of expressing your thoughts that I love about your writing ~ and you! You get to the meat of the matter, so to speak! lol

"Meat needs an onion, that is true,
but I can eat it plain, un-spiced,
and still be nourished inwardly!"

Linda

Oklahoma Rose
Senior Member

since 2008-02-28

Posts 1586
Oklahoma USA

6 posted 2008-11-30 07:50 PM

It seems like yours and my thoughts are on the same topic. Now, if only that thought was real.

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

7 posted 2008-11-30 07:56 PM

"Love exists alone unused"

enjoyed the whole poem
but this line to me
was the best

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