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Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song

0 posted 2008-11-29 04:39 PM



Victorian Thin

Were I to build an arbor in Victorian thin
Would it grant ivy vines in paths to touch
Were I to place mums in portrait of begin
Would you see this fire
               smoldering in Autumn clutch

Were I to catch three rays of golden glow
Would you braid them in morning delight
Were I to wrap the night in a starry bow
Would you find a dream  
           horizontal in constellation sight

Were I to lace a path in magnolia hall
Would it find carpets of petal perfume
Were I to plants seeds on whispers call
Would you feel the winds
           beckoning our history to resume

Were I to drink rain in diamond dance
Would it quench a thirst in visions eye
Were I to take miles in country glance
Would you find travel
            in my yearnings ... knowing why

Mark Christopher

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ThisDiamond
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1 posted 2008-11-29 04:58 PM


The arbor path is lined with the lusty blooms of fall.  Each their own of scent, and each to heart does call.

A keepsake.  Love in starlight is blessed.
TD

Still, as then, I love this one.

Margherita
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Eternity
2 posted 2008-11-29 07:01 PM


quote:
Were I to catch three rays of golden glow
Would you braid them in morning delight
Were I to wrap the night in a starry bow
Would you find a dream  
           horizontal in constellation sight



Dear Mark, this is pure delight and so elegantly written.

Romantic in a poignant way.

Makes me want to linger.

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

Juju
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In your dreams
3 posted 2008-11-29 08:34 PM


Omg you have tigers sweet!!!!!!!!!!!

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thougts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

ethome
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New Brunswick Canada
4 posted 2008-11-30 02:09 AM


Very nice, what wonderfully portrayed pictures in such a pleasurable format.

Eric

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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5 posted 2008-11-30 02:49 AM


wonderful Mark!  love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Susan Caldwell
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Florida
6 posted 2008-11-30 10:35 AM


Very beautiful..

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
7 posted 2008-11-30 08:48 PM


beautiful
just beautiful

steavenr
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8 posted 2008-12-01 12:53 PM


this, as others have rightly said, is simply beautiful, but this:

"Were I to drink rain in diamond dance
Would it quench a thirst in visions eye
Were I to take miles in country glance
Would you find travel
            in my yearnings ... knowing why"

is exquisite

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
9 posted 2008-12-01 02:38 PM


Ksthleen - I remember that reply and I thank you again.

Margherita - Linger away!!!  I appreciate you comments and visits always and I thank you for always pointing out your favorite lines.  Thank you much.

Eric - I do thank you much sir.  

RDB - Thank you

Susan - My thanks to you also

1slick_lady - Glad you found it so.  Thank you

steavenr - I do apprecitate you letting me know what you liked most.  Thank you.


suthern
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10 posted 2008-12-01 05:53 PM


When someone pens perfection as regularly as you do, it's hard to choose their best... but this is certainly in that upper echelon. *S* Such gentle queries should surely be answered affirmatively. *S*

Beautiful work!! Reading it again today is a treat... one I indulged in several times. *S*

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
11 posted 2008-12-01 06:36 PM


Gosh Mark, this is a most fantastic write. Enjoyed reading and taking it in...

BC

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
12 posted 2008-12-01 09:34 PM


Mark, if you were to...

I would wager that she would do...

Graceful writing. ~ Tender and sweet.


Linda

OwlSA
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13 posted 2008-12-02 12:04 PM


Absolutely delightful, Mark.  My very favourite line is:

Were I to drink rain in diamond dance

Please give your tiger a big hug and kiss from a South African owl.

- Owl

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
14 posted 2008-12-02 01:30 PM


Ruth - I am glad you indulged and also that you let me know it is one of your fav's.  I do thank you and appreciate you.

Bill- Thank you much sir for taking it in and leaving comment.

Linda - Those are sweet words and I thank you.

Owl - I always appreciate knowing a favorite line or verse and I thank you much.  

suthern
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15 posted 2008-12-04 03:28 PM


Were I to catch three rays of golden glow
Would you braid them in morning delight


Just... appreciating. *S* I love this image! *S*

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
16 posted 2008-12-07 12:07 PM


Ruth - I appreciate you appreciating the french braids of morning.  Thank you suthern one.
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