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Open Poetry #43

Left impression

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2008-07-21 05:01 PM

Behind him
the sun

ahead,
the calling
of cirrus clouds

nothing special today
that would catch
another's eye

i saw him
on roads he owned
both ahead
and behind

had me feeling
even more cluttered
with life

not him
not yet

on the road
on his bike
while i
was adding more clutter,
doing routines
pressing time

years ahead
of this teenage boy
faceless
from from my driver's side

on his bike
breezing by

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (07-21-2008 10:43 PM).]

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

1 posted 2008-07-21 05:28 PM

makes we wonder how you sleep at the wheel...but then again....I love your dreams

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2008-07-21 05:57 PM

not him
not yet

....

on his bike
breezing by

I enjoy this profound impression of lightness together with you.

Just beautiful.

Love,
Margherita

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

3 posted 2008-07-21 07:58 PM

.

good

John

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Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

4 posted 2008-07-21 08:31 PM

This is especially nice, Mish, the fresh uncluttered life of the 'faceless' boy, contrasted with the clutter of your day.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

5 posted 2008-07-22 07:48 PM

to go on with child like innocence...carefree...while we...drive in traffic. Enjoyed this

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