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Special Girl
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Special Girl |
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Tony123 Junior Member
since 2008-11-20
Posts 10 |
Would appreciate some constructive criticism  Special Girl... Over the past few months, A lot of amazing things have happened. I met this girl who has taken my heart away and doesn’t want to give it back... But that’s ok because I have hers! Ever Since she stepped into my life I haven’t been the same. I feel as if my dreams have come true, and are only getting better! I sometimes pinch myself to see if I’ll wake up from this oh so special dream... Am I awake? Yes. Is she real? Yes. I have found my angel. She is the one. She is my all! She means the world to me... Her spirit so sweet and lively... When I look into her beautiful eyes and hear her warming giggles.. My heart melts with joy! We continue riding this wild roller coaster that seems to never end... But I want her to know, That I’ll never let go. We will get through this together... I’ll never give up... I will continue fighting until my very last breath.. Why? Because I love you Stacey. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Welcome to Pip! No doubts about you being in love! This is a lovely romantic first entry. Love, Margherita "Love is the One who masters all things; |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Tony123 - sounds like a winner, don't let go, and don't do anything to change things... BC |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
firt, welcome to PiP, and sounds like a great inspiration for your first offering (though some would say you may be too far gone for help...smile)...no one can correct the heart...well done... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Nice romantic write. Congratulations on finding someone so special! Welcome to Pips. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Tony123, There you go Babe. This is a good love poem. Bobby |
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ms robey Junior Member
since 2008-11-18
Posts 25davenport iowa |
well spoken very carefully thought out beautiful very beautiful. |
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ms robey Junior Member
since 2008-11-18
Posts 25davenport iowa |
well spoken very carefully thought out beautiful very beautiful. |
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shortsleeves Member
since 2008-10-19
Posts 125Franklin Tennessee |
Well done Tony! Hal |
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ms robey Junior Member
since 2008-11-18
Posts 25davenport iowa |
well spoken very carefully thought out beautiful very beautiful. |
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Tony123 Junior Member
since 2008-11-20
Posts 10 |
Thanks |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
welcome to our pages blue.. I enjoyed your gifting here... thank you RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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jody5 Senior Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 876California, U.S.A. |
It is a beautiful romantic poem and i liked it very much. The only thing you should do is get rid of the and's the but's and the words that get in your way of your peace being a fantasticly well written poem. I haven't been on for awhile myself I am taking a creative writing class. Just keep writing and responding to other's poems and befor long you will be the artist you were meant to be. Welcome to Pip! Hug's Kimberly |
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Tony123 Junior Member
since 2008-11-20
Posts 10 |
Thanks Kim |
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