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2islander2
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0 posted 2008-11-20 02:05 PM



Today we bury the autumn…
Behind the hearse
walks the winter
with pensive steps,
the spring follows
with arrogant clothes,
then the most sad,
the summer
because only he
bequeathed his fortune.
Birds pray and people
get muffled up….

© Copyright 2008 yann rolland - All Rights Reserved
Earth Angel
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1 posted 2008-11-20 02:14 PM


Uniquely creative ~ and clever!


Linda

Pilgrimage
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2 posted 2008-11-20 02:36 PM


I would never have thought of this.  I'm awestruck by the notion, and envious of the execution.  

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Mark Bohannan
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3 posted 2008-11-20 02:46 PM


Beautifully written and very creative in the thinking.  Much worth a few more reads to completely absorb it's beauty and so glad I caught this one.
Tony123
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4 posted 2008-11-20 02:54 PM


Beautiful!
Bill Charles
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5 posted 2008-11-20 04:58 PM


2islander2 - more than once I read this, and each time was better than the one before...

BC

steavenr
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6 posted 2008-11-20 06:24 PM


"the summer
because only he
bequeathed his fortune"

interesting write based on an intriguing theme...nicely done

Margherita
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7 posted 2008-11-21 10:08 AM


Dear Yann, loved the uncommon visuals here!

Beautiful write!

Love,
Margherita

OwlSA
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8 posted 2008-11-21 11:07 AM


Oh, Yann, I love this - every little bit of it, all the way through and backwards and forwards again and again and again!

- Owl

Marchmadness
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9 posted 2008-11-21 03:32 PM


This is so creative, yann. I think it is one of your best.
                                 Ida

Huan Yi
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10 posted 2008-11-21 05:13 PM


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Good Yann

John

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Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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11 posted 2008-11-21 07:40 PM


This is wonderful Yann!!   love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

2islander2
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12 posted 2008-11-22 08:05 AM


Thank you everyone for the kindness of the comments, I have been touched....


regards

  yann

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13 posted 2008-11-23 12:08 PM


This is a very original way to see the onset of winter.  Well written, yann.  Thank you for sharing.
2islander2
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14 posted 2008-11-23 03:39 AM


Tahnk you Alison, I have seen a corean movie called Spring, summer, autumn, winter....And spring...It is awesome, I guess without my consent it inspired me...

regards

yann

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