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Open Poetry #43

When Love Dies

Sharon Rose
Member

since 2008-11-03

Posts 51

0 posted 2008-11-15 10:06 PM

  Within my heart a candle light.
  A brightness that lights the darkest night.
  Into the night a cold wind creeps.
  The candle light is put to sleep.

[This message has been edited by Sharon Rose (11-15-2008 11:09 PM).]

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

1 posted 2008-11-15 11:00 PM

Oh, nicely done. Just a note, it should be 'darkest' instead of 'darkess'. Don't you hate typos? I can read my poem through three times and still miss them.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

2 posted 2008-11-16 04:50 AM

Thought provoking, Sharon. Enjoyed.
Ida

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

3 posted 2008-11-16 08:51 AM

Know that feeling~~

short but precise
M

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

4 posted 2008-11-16 03:10 PM

Sharon - yes, many have been there. Keep posting, I like your poetry...

BC

Pantheress
Member

since 2008-11-02

Posts 215
Queensland, Australia

5 posted 2008-11-16 07:54 PM

This is beautiful, I wish to send you a box of matches,smiles.. Take care of you and thanks for sharing this with me..

Oklahoma Rose
Senior Member

since 2008-02-28

Posts 1586
Oklahoma USA

6 posted 2008-11-17 10:46 AM

You said so much in so few words. I sure know how that feels.

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