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Billiard Bliss |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song 
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Billiard Bliss Between swirling chords lofted in cigarette smoke Songs of laughter filling in notes of random pause Glances embraced with each lyric meant to evoke As sways of interest dance in rendering applause Corner fields of felt offer the battleground for cues Where solids and stripes chalk up chances of gain Singles become partners between pocketed views Banking shots against barriers on friendships reign Glimpses of tease squint through tequilla and lime Taunting the visions between desires and dreams Eyes of penetration reaching deep within this time Through smiles of elegance in the purest of means Attraction sealed within the maze of passion dance Concentration lost in all values of game set in play Time reclining against the arms of destined chance Knowing this kiss will have to wait for another day Mark Christopher - |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Well done. Being the queen of stripes... I certainly appreciated the green felt corners, and glimpse into a smile I had almost forgotten... those left handed banks always create a little chaos of their own accord! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
As the old adage goes: "Anticipation is half the fun!"  You did a masterful job of creating an atmosphere!  Linda |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You make poetry look so darn easy! This was incredible Mark, good to read you again. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Mark - whatever you write you do it very well. Enjoying reading this... BC |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Dear Mark, I love your refined choice of expressions and the neat presentation ... it is pure pleasure to read you and to enter your vivid scenery. Love, Margherita  |
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shortsleeves Member
since 2008-10-19
Posts 125Franklin Tennessee |
Great work Mark!I enjoyed that piece; I became a cue ball of thought. Hal |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Yes I agree on that one, the atmosphere in this poem was created well by your mind and your creative thoughts. All the poet in you, releases in that wonderful pen of yours!! ARCTIC WIND |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
As always you paint the picture so very well |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Kathleen - I am sure you your crown well. Thank you. Linda - Thank you and you are so right. Anticipation is a wonderful thing. Mysteria - Thank you for your always kind words. Bill- I am glad you enjoyed it and I thank you. Margherita - It is pure pleasure to have your visits and you and I am glad you entered the scenery. Hal - Thank you much Artic - Always kind words from you and I appreciate that. Thank you. Paula - Thank you and nice to see your name in here. |
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Pantheress Member
since 2008-11-02
Posts 215Queensland, Australia |
I liked your poem and really enjoyed reading what you wrote.. Thank you for sharing this with me,smiles.. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"Singles become partners between pocketed views Banking shots against barriers on friendships reign" excellent as always~~ I haven't been in a pool hall in ages but remember it well  M |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Very well done! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Pantheress - Thank you and I am glad you enjoyed nakdthoughts - I should stay out of them but I am drawn to the game. Thank you much. Oklahoma Rose - Thank you. I appreciate your visit. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Ah..here it is. And I shall restrain myself from the obvious punchline regarding balls and racks so I can thank you properly for allowing me to remember a place in time that was once a safe haven to me.  (I still love the sound of the release, though. *chuckle* Does a game still cost fifty cents?) I haven't been played a game in a lonnnnng time. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"Time reclining against the arms of destined chance" beautifully creative words in a cleverly pennned write...enjoyed |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Mark, I could smell the smoke, taste the tequila and heard the balls being broken. Thank you. Alison |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
As a player, I'm a really, really good... cheerleader. *G* But Alison is right... your words engage all the senses... and there's no place I'd rather be. *S* |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
The way you use meter is so unique! I'd swear you're using a Greek scansion, but I can't place it, and the cadence flows so naturally that I've a feeling it comes from inside the poet rather than an outside pattern. So I'll just call it Classical Mark, and spend some time trying to understand why it's so effective. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ok mark...this is video pool on the PC with a bud light and a pack of camels right? enjoyed it amigo! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Karen - The release is always a treat in the game, but 50 cents? Not around here, but I have learned that as long as I win the table then the challenger has to drop the $1.25. Thanks for the smiles. steavenr-Thank you for finding it clever. Alison-If you could taste the tequilla then I think I just bought you a shot. Thanks much. Ruth - If your senses were engaged then I am happy. Thank you much. Ratleader - I am not sure of what meter it is as I just type with my eyes closed until the pop open. I thank you for your comments and happy you found it effective. Dark - Bud light??????? Is that a real beer?? Thank you my friend of SO CA |
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