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sewasham
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0 posted 2008-11-13 09:45 AM


Dance Of The Wind Fish

When autumn trees sway with the breeze
In graceful elegance
Then just beyond on the little pond
The wind fish come to dance

As sky and sun become as one
While fading in the west
The wind fish spin on airy fin
Upon the waters crest

First fast then slow, the breeze will blow
Leaving a rippling wake
The wind fish play at end of day
And ‘cross the surface break

They play and dart as waters part
While back and forth they go
A gust of air will send them there
Dancing with graceful flow

My love and I sit there close by
And watch as if in trance
When the sun is low and breezes blow
And the wind fish come to dance



© Copyright 2008 Stephen E. Washam - All Rights Reserved
Pilgrimage
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1 posted 2008-11-13 11:26 AM


I've often walked by the city pond (we call it a lake- it takes up about 3 city blocks) and watched the ripples.  When the sun is just right, they're silver on a dark blue water, and I've tried in my mind to find a metaphor or simile to describe it in a poem.  And then, here you are!  Perfect image.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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2 posted 2008-11-13 01:11 PM


Your poems are always uplifting, sometimes humorous and always leave a smile, Stephen.
A gift from you, Thank you.
                                Ida

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3 posted 2008-11-13 01:38 PM


This is quite wonderful, Steve. Thanks for sharing such lovely pleasant imagery!

And thank you for your kind thoughts, they leave me with a sense of warmth and comfort.  

Alison
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4 posted 2008-11-20 01:14 AM


You write lovely so well.  This is romantic - I can see the picture in my mind as the wind fish dance.

Well done.

A

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5 posted 2008-11-20 07:30 AM


Superb writing, Steve. The "wind fish" description is first-rate and you are true to a difficult rhyme scheme. Nicely done....
Pantheress
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6 posted 2008-11-20 07:55 AM


That was so very nice.. I really enjoyed reading it, thank you
Earth Angel
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7 posted 2008-11-20 10:10 AM


Steve, I absolutely love the imagery, the rhythm and rhyme! ~ as well as the romantic aspect of this delightful poem. I can guarantee you, m'friend, I will think of this poem whenever I see the "wind fish" ripple effect of a breeze blowing over a pond!

Warm hug and a broad smile!
Linda

GothicCherry
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8 posted 2008-11-20 10:20 AM


this is a very lovely poem..i usually tend to like shorter works but once i began reading this write i had to reread it many times for i loved it so much.. thank you. =]


sewasham
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9 posted 2008-11-20 08:33 PM


Thanks Nan, I've got a whole pond full of those wind fish that I'm trying to catch. Just need to figure out what bait to use.

Ida, I'm glad you enjoyed dancing with the wind fish.

Kacy, you are in my thoughts and prayers often. Stay strong and take care.

Ali, I appreciate the kind words. Thank you.

Mike, coming from one of the best rhymers I know that is a real compliment. Thank you sir.

Pantheress, I'm very glad you enjoyed the wind fish dance. Thank you for commenting.

Linda, I always appreciate hearing from you. Watching the wind fish dance is a special treat. Take care dear.

GothicCherry, I'm glad it held your attention and brought some enjoyment. Thanks for your comments. Take care and Have fun.


Mark Bohannan
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10 posted 2008-11-21 12:51 PM


I could visualize it, feel it, and breathe it in.  The images were portrayed with excellence and I didn't miss the rhyme scheme either.  Very well done.
Alison
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11 posted 2008-11-26 12:07 PM


Wind Fish can not disappear so quickly.

A

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12 posted 2008-11-27 01:34 PM


This mesmorizes.......
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