Open Poetry #43 |
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Dance Of The Wind Fish |
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sewasham Senior Member
since 2006-09-11
Posts 714Oklahoma, USA ![]() |
Dance Of The Wind Fish When autumn trees sway with the breeze In graceful elegance Then just beyond on the little pond The wind fish come to dance As sky and sun become as one While fading in the west The wind fish spin on airy fin Upon the waters crest First fast then slow, the breeze will blow Leaving a rippling wake The wind fish play at end of day And ‘cross the surface break They play and dart as waters part While back and forth they go A gust of air will send them there Dancing with graceful flow My love and I sit there close by And watch as if in trance When the sun is low and breezes blow And the wind fish come to dance |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
![]() Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Your poems are always uplifting, sometimes humorous and always leave a smile, Stephen. A gift from you, Thank you. Ida |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This is quite wonderful, Steve. Thanks for sharing such lovely pleasant imagery! And thank you for your kind thoughts, they leave me with a sense of warmth and comfort. |
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Alison![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
You write lovely so well. This is romantic - I can see the picture in my mind as the wind fish dance. Well done. A |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Superb writing, Steve. The "wind fish" description is first-rate and you are true to a difficult rhyme scheme. Nicely done.... |
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Pantheress Member
since 2008-11-02
Posts 215Queensland, Australia |
That was so very nice.. I really enjoyed reading it, thank you |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Steve, I absolutely love the imagery, the rhythm and rhyme! ~ as well as the romantic aspect of this delightful poem. I can guarantee you, m'friend, I will think of this poem whenever I see the "wind fish" ripple effect of a breeze blowing over a pond! ![]() Warm hug and a broad smile! Linda ![]() |
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GothicCherry Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471TN |
this is a very lovely poem..i usually tend to like shorter works but once i began reading this write i had to reread it many times for i loved it so much.. thank you. =] |
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sewasham Senior Member
since 2006-09-11
Posts 714Oklahoma, USA |
Thanks Nan, I've got a whole pond full of those wind fish that I'm trying to catch. Just need to figure out what bait to use. Ida, I'm glad you enjoyed dancing with the wind fish. Kacy, you are in my thoughts and prayers often. Stay strong and take care. Ali, I appreciate the kind words. Thank you. Mike, coming from one of the best rhymers I know that is a real compliment. Thank you sir. Pantheress, I'm very glad you enjoyed the wind fish dance. Thank you for commenting. Linda, I always appreciate hearing from you. Watching the wind fish dance is a special treat. Take care dear. GothicCherry, I'm glad it held your attention and brought some enjoyment. Thanks for your comments. Take care and Have fun. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I could visualize it, feel it, and breathe it in. The images were portrayed with excellence and I didn't miss the rhyme scheme either. Very well done. |
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Alison![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Wind Fish can not disappear so quickly. A |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
This mesmorizes....... |
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