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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
circle of life in a fish bowl clear lacking clouds of unfrought dreams living a style of unshed tears upheld loosely by scuttled schemes sun shines softly through the open blinds opalescent glows through the glass wall beams distorting visions as the rays unwind and bend their arms in shadow-gleams life lives on in the latent bowl lending its breath to the constant din of drench-dew prints on a pauper's dole removing life-forms-lost of their paltry skin circle of life in a fish bowl clear unseen patterns in the form of a tear |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I had a sense of someone that had mastered a life plan, without any conflict or chaos. Everything neatly passing by, nothing pressing. It is this human warrior spirit, this eternal battle with the head and the heart, that stirs our consciousness and moves us in risk and ritual to victory. Without it, we are complacent and lonely. Tears...a proper energy to wash away the mundane, making room for a river of thoughts and promises. Oh...I was intrigued by this one!  |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Steavenr, The thought is there. Bobby |
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Freely_expressing Member
since 2008-10-16
Posts 69NSW, Australia |
Very emotive imagery there  I like it!Especially appreciate the imagery in the second verse - The last line "and bend their arms in shadow gleams" was especially good. Imagery with enough complexity to make it vivid but not too much too make it hard to comprehend. Thanks for the read - Ben |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
TD, you never cease to amaze me how you let the works of others speak to you on such insightful levels...always honored to read your comments...thank you Bobby, it is always nice to have you read and comment...I appreciate it Ben, thank you...your comments are not only appreciated but enjoyed as well...so glad you liked it enough to leave your gracious comments |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
You know, I have a whole lot of unshed tears. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Oklahoma, thank you for reading and sharing...you know, tears are God's ways of cleansing the soul...shed them, share them and never let them build up |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Wonderful. Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
viking, thank you taking the time to read and comment...it is appreciated |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Steaven... your poetry is truly amazing and a joy to read and savor... thank you for sharing... I really loved this... love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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