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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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. This Is a story Not often told There is By a town Not far from here A cross on a hill On the ground There are no Bloodied garments Cast aside Only the head Of a hammer And three rusting nails There was At least one man Who did not come To Jerusalem To suffer For the sins Of the world You ask me intrigued How I know these things And I smile . |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo John, You are absolutely right, and some do it more than once. Bobby |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed the Write!  ARCTIC WIND |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. Thank you both Didn't expect it to be popular . . . Thanks again John |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
very cleverly devised--it appears to be simple but not through my eyes. *smiles* |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
One died so i could live |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
If I could only commented on the works I fully understood, this is one I could never comment on. I have read it over and over and studied its nuances, but if I were to say that I fully understood this one, I would be lying...but, the structure of this write is amazing...it speaks in ways that complicate it more and more with each reading. It is amazing. |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
There was At least one man Who did not come To Jerusalem To suffer For the sins Of the world this is mysterious to me...Is it a condemnation ? yann |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. Yann No Just different choices John . |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
And I ask, intrigued, how you so consistently come up with such gloriously arresting poetry. Wow's overused, but wow anyway! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. Thanks Ed, Sometimes especially in hard times they're given to me . . . Thanks again John PS You just confirmed for me this one as my choice to submit to the Illinois State Poetry site for their December listing. . |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Fascinating. I particularly enjoyed the symbolism of the single hammerhead and the three rusty nails - and the multiple possibilities and probabilities of who the man could be. - Owl |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Facinating, Takes my thoughts in many directions. Ida |
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